Revan studied the top of the doorway, using the Force to inspect the door mechanism. She had a private suspicion that the huge slab of stone would give way and crush her the second she walked under it. After a moment, she felt relatively safe from such an event and let her gaze drift downward. She shuddered and instinctively hugged herself, as though a large pocket of cold air had unexpectedly wafted out through the opening.
There had been no actual change in temperature, however. What Revan felt was the tug of the dark side.
She looked down. A fog that she hadn't noticed before, a deep, near-black purple in color, had appeared and now clung low to the floor. Though it was thin enough that Revan could easily see the floor through it, the fog looked heavy, swirling lazily like gigantic ocean waves, almost as though frozen in time. Tiny lines of a brighter violet light cracked and sizzled noiselessly within the fog. It all had a hypnotizing sort of effect; just looking at it made Revan want to look at it more, to drink in the otherworldly sight, to explore the secrets of the abyss, but she managed to tear her gaze upward.
This'll be the first time I've nominated someone else's work, so here goes nothing:
Through Glass by MPK takes place at least a couple of years after the climactic final battle of the Jedi Civil War, and stars none other than the enigmatic Revan...herself. Yeah, that's right, her. Though some folks might be a little bit antsy about different genders for canon characters that have set ones, including myself, the story itself was compelling enough to put such thoughts aside. The story itself is loosely based on the scenes in KotOR II where the Jedi Exile visits the tomb of Ludo Kressh, but the similarities are superficial only. While the two tales follow roughly the same path, MPK's version of Revan's experience is rich in narrative detail and very much original in its content. Revan has entirely different experiences, all of which are very compelling and quite well thought-out. His version of the star of KotOR is well-rounded and true to herself, and much more human than your average fanboy or fangirl might imagine. Pacing is good, as is the vocabulary, and the dialogue is very true-to-character—with the possible exception of HK-47, but that's just me. Overall, I give this novella a solid 8 out of 10. GoodwoodDebating Society12,018 Edits 03:12, January 12, 2011 (UTC)
Archivist review from the desk of Atarumaster88
As mentioned, this story by veteran author MPK traces the path of a female Revan through a tomb on Korriban. There's an excellent blend of dialogue, introspection, and action, and the tomb is described well enough that you can almost see yourself playing through it in one of those impressive levels sculpted by Bioware for their RPG games. The plot was intriguing and kept the reader engaged in the story and despite the focus on a single character, it was well-developed and presented a variety of scenarios and emotions. I honestly could find nothing worth mentioning other than the occasional sticky wording. 5/5 narrative, 4.5/5 technical. Atarumaster88(Talk page) 05:58, February 21, 2011 (UTC)