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==''[[My Mother's Dreams]]'' by [[User:Brandon Rhea|Brandon Rhea]]== |
==''[[My Mother's Dreams]]'' by [[User:Brandon Rhea|Brandon Rhea]]== |
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'''Nominated by:''' [[User:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">'''Atarumaster88'''</span>]] <sup>([[User talk:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">Talk page</span>]])</sup> 22:05, May 4, 2016 (UTC) |
'''Nominated by:''' [[User:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">'''Atarumaster88'''</span>]] <sup>([[User talk:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">Talk page</span>]])</sup> 22:05, May 4, 2016 (UTC) |
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In her eyes, I see myself, the woman I used to be. I see the hope that burned so bright that it fueled the fires of rebellion. And in this moment, my mind wanders. |
In her eyes, I see myself, the woman I used to be. I see the hope that burned so bright that it fueled the fires of rebellion. And in this moment, my mind wanders. |
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+ | ==Support (2 Archivists/3 Users/5 Total)== |
+ | #Approved! [[User:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">'''Atarumaster88'''</span>]] <sup>([[User talk:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">Talk page</span>]])</sup> 20:49, June 13, 2016 (UTC) |
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+ | #Nice stuff Brandon. [[User:SavageOpress1138|''<span style="color: maroon; font-family: Georgia">Savage</span>'']]<sup>[[User talk:SavageOpress1138|'''<span style="color: tan; font-family: Verdana">1138</span>''']]</sup> 15:39, August 23, 2016 (UTC) |
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+ | #I know there is some sort of joke involving the ''Force Awakens'' and the title of this story around here somewhere.-[[User:I'm the Chosen One|'''''<span style="color: #4169E1; font-family: Tahoma;">I'm the Chosen One</span>''''']] 04:55, March 9, 2017 (UTC) |
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+ | #I read it and I liked it. -'''''[[User:MPK|<font color="#990000">MPK]],</font> [[User talk:MPK|<font color="#990000">Free Man''</font>]]''' 22:44, May 14, 2017 (UTC) |
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+ | #Though I have little love for Disney canon, I can grudgingly admit that I enjoyed this piece. Let's push this through to FW status. [[User:Sebolto|<span style="color:#FF33CC; font-weight:bold;">'''Sebolto'''</span>]]<sup>[[User talk:Sebolto|<span style="color:#FF33CC; font-weight:bold;">Talk</span>]]</sup> 16:59, April 20, 2020 (UTC) |
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==Objections== |
==Objections== |
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+ | *'''The Dusty Desk''' |
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+ | **<s>Some kind of BTS would be much appreciated (or background if BTS is too cheesy of a name)</s> |
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+ | **<s>Page 2: "piece of mind" -> "peace of mind"</s> |
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+ | **<s>Top of page 4 "I may have never needed to know the truth" This seems a bit awkwardly phrased. Is the intent along the lines of "I may not have needed to ever know the truth"?</s> |
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+ | **<s>"but admire here" -> "but admire her"</s> |
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+ | **Otherwise, pretty clean. I don't agree with all of the mental jumps in the characters, but nothing I find particularly objectionable. Cheers. [[User:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">'''Atarumaster88'''</span>]] <sup>([[User talk:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">Talk page</span>]])</sup> 20:23, May 18, 2016 (UTC) |
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+ | ***All of these are taken care of. Thanks! - [[User:Brandon Rhea|<font color="#1A2BBB">'''Brandon Rhea'''</font>]] [[File:Alliance Starbird.svg|15px|link=Star Wars: Episode I - The Chosen One]] <sup>[[User_talk:Brandon Rhea|<font color="#1A2BBB">(talk)</font>]]</sup> 17:05, June 13, 2016 (UTC) |
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==Comments== |
==Comments== |
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*As much as I am absolutely tepid about NuCanon, this was well-written. Full review to follow. I will message Brandon to supply an excerpt, because I cba to copy from a .pdf. [[User:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">'''Atarumaster88'''</span>]] <sup>([[User talk:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">Talk page</span>]])</sup> 22:05, May 4, 2016 (UTC) |
*As much as I am absolutely tepid about NuCanon, this was well-written. Full review to follow. I will message Brandon to supply an excerpt, because I cba to copy from a .pdf. [[User:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">'''Atarumaster88'''</span>]] <sup>([[User talk:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">Talk page</span>]])</sup> 22:05, May 4, 2016 (UTC) |
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+ | :'''Archivist Review''' |
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+ | It's been awhile since I last read anything from Brandon Rhea, but I will tell you this: Brandon's all about getting into the head of his characters and understanding and explaining what's going on in there. That's a very noticeable trait of his writing and it's on full display here, as most of the story occurs within a few in-universe moments, with a flashback memory occupying much of the plot. Yet the gravity and emotional context of that moment has quite the story to tell, and despite my personal distaste for JJWars, I did appreciate this story for what it does--in fact, the crux of it, absent the framing device, could just as easily be applied to traditional canon. Some of the emotional links that Leia makes to her mother seem a bit tenuous for me, and I think Brandon somewhat overemphasizes the importance of Leia's newfound connection within a single moment rather than understating it or at least developing it over time. I feel it would have been more of a gradual recognition rather than a single epiphany as Brandon portrayed it. Nevertheless, I found this story compelling and well-written. 4.5/5 narrative, 4.5/5 technical. [[User:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">'''Atarumaster88'''</span>]] <sup>([[User talk:Atarumaster88|<span style="color:seagreen;">Talk page</span>]])</sup> 20:31, May 18, 2016 (UTC) |
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