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J.J. Cushwex

  • I live in The United States of America, The State of Ohio
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  • Hey JJ! Long time no talk; I am still anxious to read about The Fallen. Like a few weeks ago, if you want me to read through a portion of one of the chapters, let me know and I'd be happy to do it!

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    • Okay, here you go: 

      It's, actually, pretty easy to get a decent amount of Telling eliminated. At least, in my opinion. Here are some things to consider... 

      • (1) Use sensory details to convey the setting. Using things like; sound, smell and touch can really draw people into the world your writing and is a good way to enhance your showing. 
      • (2) Describe emotions. This is one of the toughest, as I have seen some real authors who struggle with this. 

      Instead of saying something like, he was mad, or, she was angry, describe why. Describe the characters train of thought. I tend to do this by simply getting myself in character, and saying what I'd think in the situation. 

      • (3) The biggest, would be to show how characters act instead of tell it. Instead of introducing a character by saying how they act, (Like, he's a nice pretty nice guy, or, he was a cruel and despicable person) Show it. Give them a scene early on where they help someone out of their free will, or a scene of them doing something cruel. 

      Hopefully that's helpful! If you need more, I might be able to do more for you. Have a good weekend! 

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    • Thanks so much! It did indeed help a lot, hopefully I'll put it to good use! If you need any help with anything, let me know. Thanks again.

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  • This is still in the future—I'd like to see more original contributions from you too—but have you given any thought to one day being a moderator, like Sebolto? You seem to have the instinct the help other users, as well as a decent knowledge of applicable policies for a user with only half a year on the site. Just something to consider.

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  • Sorry I missed you joining a couple times. I was tabbed over to another screen and didn't see it. I'll be there for a little longer if you cared to discuss!

    Ataru

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  • Hey JJ! Hope all is well. If you get a chance, would you take a look at Deadstorm now that it is complete? Also, when will SOTJ: The Fallen be in post-production? I can't wait for it!

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    • I should be able to get a look at it sometime soon. With The Fallen, I've actually encountered a few delays so probably not till later this year. I can't wait too release it either, it's going to be awesome!

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    • Hey Ricky! 

      Just to let you know, I finished reading Deadstorm today, but accidentally deleted the review I had made of it. But, I should be able to have a new one tommorow. 

      God bless! 

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    • Thank you my friend! Keep in mind, General BH wrote chapters 2, 3, and 5. Thanks again! 

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  • Hey J.J., I'm feeling nice today, so I just wanted to thank you for all you do on this Wiki. I've been reviewing stuff in the feedback section, and have noticed your comments. Quite frankly, you give good advice, and it's helped me out too. And you were very quick to welcome me when I joined this site. So thank you, and God bless you and your family! :)

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    • Hey thanks! I try to be as helpful as possible with everyone (on the Wiki and in real life) and I'm happy to see I was able to help someone during my time here! 

      Also, I've read a couple chapters of your Dr. Who fanfic. (Sorry I forget the title) I do have some criticisms that I'll save for when I'm finished, but I'll say now that it's written resonably well, so good job there! 

      Hope you have a great day, and God bless! 

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    • Alright, thanks for reading! Can't wait to hear your criticisms!

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  • Hi, I'm Atarumaster88 and I'm organizing this year's short story contest. Thank you for your participation in the contest thus far! I'm excited to read all of the submittals! Here's a quick reminder that there are two weeks left to nominate short stories (yours or someone else's) in the contest! After that, we'll have another four weeks of reviewing and voting! As a bit of fine print, though, this contest is only open to stories written in the current year! Thanks again for participating and being part of the community! Atarumaster88 (Talk page) 17:45, July 17, 2020 (UTC)

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  • Thank you for your insight on my short story, Star Wars: Zero Hour. I would be happy to not only take your advice, but also let you be part of the project if you would be willing.

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  • Hello, I'm just copy and pasting my reply to the message you left on my Wall, in case you hadn't seen it there. 

    Yes I totally agree with how it could have been constructed better (what is there so far and even future content). I've written a lot for many years but I've always struggled with properly constructing a text. And as you pointed out, yes! You can see that it's like half article, half narrative and I want it to be an article obviously but struggle at it sadly. Since you are offering some help, I'd totally appreciate it!

    I haven't thought of that  much yet, but I would like to do some in the future.

    Again thank you for the lovely feedback and I wouldn't mind some help!

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    • From what I've seen it is better, great job! 

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    • Thank you!

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  • Hey there! I'm appreciative of your recent efforts to improve the formatting & categorization of fan-fiction articles on the wiki. As a friendly reminder, categories must exist on the wiki as created, populated entities before they can be applied to articles. Regarding your edits here & here in particular, Category:Fanfiction does not exist—the category for which you're looking is Category:Fan fiction. Unfortunately, Wikia removed the styling code that previously displayed nonexistent categories as redlinks, so the only way to determine if categories actually exist is to navigate to their respective URLs & check them manually.

    Let me know if you have any questions or require clarification. Thanks!

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    Hi! It's me. First, I'd like to say I've began the rewriting of the first five chapters of Whispers of Dorin, so they will be at peak performance once I publish them here. As I said, they'll be in pentalogies, so stay tuned! But, enough about me. I've finally gotten around to reading Sword of the Jedi: The Fall, and I've left an honest review in the comment section. Check it out!
     

    —Kind regards (and God Bless to you this time), Octo

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    • Howdy! First thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed it! I really appreciate when people take the time to read my stuff, so big thanks! 

      Second, with your novel, I can't wait! What you had the first time was definetly interesting (if flawed) and I'm excited to see what a finished version will be like. 

      Again, thank you and God bless! 

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