Howdy! As promised, here are my thoughts on First Impressions!
This is actually probably one of the better things I've read so far on the wiki! All the elements worked well: The characters were likeable and their arcs, even if short, were well thought out. The descriptions were clear, but not wordy. The dialogue was beleivable and the story was engaging. Great job!
I don't have any major complaints, but if you want, I could go through a second time and get nitpicky. See if there's somethings I can find.
Again, great job! I'm excited to see how this series continues! I'll be sure to check out Second Guessed as soon as possible!
Okay thanks for answers! I wanted try to put in as many nominations as possible (meeting the criteria of course.) so that you don't have to combine any of the categories. Have a great day and God bless!
I really like what you've done with it, and it reminds me of some of my early explorations in that space. To that end, the next step I took was finding metallic textures that appeared more beaten and worn for a more realistic look in line with the rest of the GFFA. Still, what you've done is very commendable! Nice work, I find it much more impressive now!
Excuse me, first thing I would like to say is please don't think I'm one of those people that go and spam people's pages till they review their stuff, I'm not, I've just seen some of your reviews for other people's stuff and reall respect your opinion, and I want my writing to be the best it can be.
If you haven't guessed from the first part, I would like you to review my short story, If it's no trouble.
I posted a review to your story on its page. I did skim the comments that others left you and generally agree with them (especially Sakaros's comments) but focused my review on both a holistic view of the work as well as my own points of emphasis. Thanks for sending me a link; I think it has lots of potential.
First, I would like to thank you for reading my short story!
Second, I agree with what you said. I'm going to work out the errors at an uknown point (I'm currently writing a novel that this will tie into) and I'll be sure to use your advice when I do so. And use your advice while I write the novel and any forthcoming stories I write.
Again, huge thanks for reviewing my work, like I said above, I really appreciate your opinion. Have a good weekend and God bless!
Hello, I'm Sakaros, Star Wars Fanon Administrator and host of the Fifteenth Wiki Awards! Since you've been an active contributor here on Star Wars Fanon in the last year, I'd like to invite you to take part in this year's Wiki Awards in celebration of the best fanon & fan fiction our wiki has to offer!
Hey there. I highly appreciate your feedback on Star Wars: Civil War; I hopefully learned from what you have written. I also could not agree more on what you said. If you would like to read and review Star Wars: The Yuuzhan Vong, please feel free. I strongly think that this story is a major improvement in the series. Cheers!
The cover was a collaboration with another SWF user who is no longer active, sadly. I picked out some of the source images and she put it all together. It's at least 90% her work and it turned out great.
I have reviewed your story. it is an improvement over Civil War, but I feel there is still considerable opportunity for growth. Check out the comment I left you and good luck with your future endeavors.
I am an original character guy, so my preference is going to lean towards characters that you yourself have written and developed. Sure, it's fun to bring in Han Solo and have a go at writing Harrison Ford's character, but I enjoy it more when the main characters aren't an interpretation of existing canon character. SWF characters like Raen Benax, Tirien Kal-Di, and yes even Laera Reyole are more intriguing to me, so I enjoyed reading about characters that I presume you invented, like Ponds.
I kind of brought Ponds "back" in a sense. I think I made up Rahr, Colly, most of Carg, and Scrape. But I like expanding on clone soldiers that barely got well-deserved screentime in the shows. I am in the midst of reading Force Exile: The Fugitive and when I'll be all done, I'll give you some feedback!
I can't remember if I've said so already in the past, but I very much appreciate how you read and offered measures of feedback on all of the stories I've written here, at least up to 2017 (stretching back to my arrival in what - 2007? Yikes), not to mention my atomic nerdrage essays.
One other thing - every couple years I feel like reading your own stuff, and then I try to read Force Exile I, and for whatever reason I fail to stick with it for more than a few chapters. If I were to try again to get into FE, do you reckon I could start with some of the less-dauntingly-long-looking stories in Yanibar Tales, or would I just be lost and not know who anybody is or what's going on?
Your post reminds me that I need to check out some of your more recent stuff, though it will have to be after the New Year if I am going to finish the things I said I would! I seem to be missing a review of Your Weapon Your Life as well, which just shows how oblivious I've become in my old age because I know I read that back in ...*checks notes* ... 2012.
As to your question about the FEmpire, here is what I recommend as a reading order and have started Mrs. Ataru on very, very slowly. I will warn you that Fugitive is the first fan-fiction work I wrote 12 years ago, so there is a steep drop-off in quality once you get there.
Thanks for that list. I shall keep it in mind for whenever I find the time and inclination. It reminds me, though - I could swear I've already read The Cauldron. I remember nothing except that it's about an ARC Trooper, some volcanic planet, and shooting things (and that I enjoyed it).
For whenever you feel like starting in on my own recent stories, you can skip over The Betrayer. I don't know if you remember, but you did in fact read it and give me a review of sorts back in January of 2018. Moreover, my very recent novella Critical Points is a replacement/hard rewrite of that (with your criticisms of the original being one influence in the process). Torchbearer is a much thicker read at around 120,000 words (spent two off-and-on years on that one). Any feedback you might offer when you can, I'd think the world of it.
I was looking at your impressive and somewhat staggering statistics, and after accepting that I will still have a long way to go toward the "least capable of brevity" award even if and when the UNSWS dethrones JM76 from the #2 spot, I noticed you described some of your work as "vignettes". Even more intriguing, Vignettes is a category and has been for a decade, but none of your works are in it. Was "vignette" once a classification for fiction shorter than a short story which has since fallen by the wayside, or was that merely a stylistic choice on your part?
Hey, apparently I never responded to this. How unusual and disappointing of me--sorry about that. I didn't use the category of Vignettes because I wasn't aware it existed. I instead categorized my handful of vignettes into the Yanibar Tales category, itself a subcategory of short story. While I could go back and add vignettes to the stories in question, I am not sure that having a piece be in both Short Stories and Vignettes is appropriate. Thoughts?
It's an intriguing question, particularly because Brandon didn't supply a definition for "vignettes" when he made the category. The common definition of "a short, one-scene, character-focused story" seems to apply, though; of the four works so categorized, all of them are one scene, and the longest is 2,319 words. Brandon's own contribution is substantially shorter than even that, at 306 words.
I think the "one-scene, character-focused" part is more relevant to the definition of a vignette than the "short" part, especially because, if a work holds to those first two requirements, the third one should usually follow naturally. In other words, short story/novella/novel is about length, while vignette is more about the nature of the content. On that alone, I don't see any inherent conflict in something being labeled both a short story and a vignette; if someone tried to sell me on something being both a novella and a vignette, I might be more skeptical.
I suppose the counterargument is that short story, novella, and novel—based as they are on word count alone—have hard, objective criteria which any user can apply to properly categorize a work. "Vignette" is more amorphous; it's hard to come up with criteria other than "shorter than a novella" and "it is because the author says it is". Maybe you could add a "no more than one subpage, with no scene breaks" criterion to enforce the "one scene" aspect.
" In other words, short story/novella/novel is about length, while vignette is more about the nature of the content. On that alone, I don't see any inherent conflict in something being labeled both a short story and a vignette; "
I agree with this. There's no harm in having both categories. Vignette to me seems mostly superfluous as a category anyway since 1) there are so few of them, and 2) there's not a tremendous push on this wiki to properly categorize fan-fiction. I would be okay with both deleting the category and merging its current occupants into short stories, or with leaving it as is. I may revisit the labeling of those works of mine since I believe some of them are not technically vignettes as one or two might have little postludes that are technically scene breaks.
I agree with both your points. I went through last year and cleaned house in Novels, recategorizing the Future novels and Novels in progress, but that's the most I've accomplished toward proper categorization.
Thanks for that, Brandon. Each of them has a special place in my heart, which is the cheesy-yet-true thing for an author to say.
I think in terms of literary quality, Force Exile VI: Prodigal does the best job of having a unified storyline and developing the antagonist to be an equal foil for the protagonists. I love Guardian for its original trilogy tie-ins (and yes, the more humorous characters like Taelros Bac), but the villains are a little flat since they are cribbed from a video game. Hard for me to say!