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This is the review page for the successful featured article nomination of Sector 13.

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Approve (5 Council of Seers/5 users/10 total)

  1. Brent Krajewski Pylon (The Forge) (Gateway) 22:10, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
  2. れび (talk to Lavi!) 22:13, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
  3. Council of Seers vote — JM76 Ask Archives Sabersmilyjm76 23:01, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
  4. --”'Wylind”' (talk) 00:18, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
  5. Council of Seers vote --Xepeyon You Speak, I've Spoken 00:28, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
  6. Nacen (Talk) 00:56, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
  7. Council of Seers vote Because shadow governments are cool. Oh and objections addressed and all that jazz. Trak Nar Ramble on 03:32, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
  8. Council of Seers vote GenoHaradan forever. –Victor Squishy Vic (talk page) 04:08, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
  9. Council of Seers vote -Solus (Bird of Prey) 04:28, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
  10. Because I can. Mulluns (Talk) 04:37, 19 July 2009 (UTC)

Objections

  1. Council of Seers vote JM76's review
    • History/Establishment
      • "He subsequently ordered the creation of Sector 13, a cover intelligence organization..." I believe you mean 'covert'.
    • History/Early days
      • "During its early history, Sector 13 was used to eliminate potential separatist sentiments and to counter revolutionary activities throughout the Republic." Some detail would be nice. How exactly would they 'eliminate' the 'separatist sentiment'?
      • "despite being founded on the principles of freedom" Might want to specify that this means 'freedom of speech' and 'freedom of thought'; principles of freedom is a very broad term.
        • I can't go into anymore detail due to being restricted by the source material. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue (talk) 03:26, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
      • "While the group did still participate in counter-revolutionary endeavors..." Could easily be reworded as "While the group still participated..."
    • Organization
      • Did the Supreme Chancellor know of the identity of his agents, or was this information restricted to 'The Director'? I ask because it's not all that clear, but seems relevant.
    • BtS
      • No influences? No mention of a creator? For shame, Bac.
        • I mentioned the think tank as a creator, but I can't go into influences because the think tank cannot be sourced. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue (talk) 03:26, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
          • You could mention - and link to - some users saying that, for example, Silas's profile appears very "Orwellian" and Kurt's offhand comment to "Machiavelli". Since Silas is the head of Sector 13, I would assume their opinions could extend to the organization itself. — JM76 Ask Archives Sabersmilyjm76 03:30, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
        • That starts getting into speculation. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue (talk) 03:40, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
    • And that's about all. Not too bad for a little article that does not exist. — JM76 Ask Archives Sabersmilyjm76 03:20, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
  2. Council of Seers vote and stuff.
    • Intro
      • ...the Alsakan Union, a religious government destroyed at the end of the Alsakan Crisis against the Republic. Wording. Did you mean "...by the Republic"?
      • Some of these included... Reference. Some of these what? It is not immediately clear as to what this is referring to.
    • Establishment
      • Nothing.
    • Early days
      • ...were no longer its primary focus. Instead, the focus of Sector 13 turned to ... Redundancy. "Focus" is used twice in quick succession. A synonym replacement for one of these would be nice.
      • ...hoping to weaken the Hutt forces so the Republic would stand a better chance at victory against them. Awkward. The sentence just reads kind of awkward.
    • Function
      • Additional and higher classified missions would include assistance to underground movements... Logic. While I understand where you're coming from, I assume that they wouldn't want to assist the anti-Republic underground movements...
    • Organization
      • Sector 13 was made up of a number of individuals... ORLY? Sorry, I couldn't resist. :D
      • The first and lowest was “Initiate”. Punctuation. Commas. And. Periods. Go. Inside. QUOTATION MARKS.
      • The second possible rank was “Agent”, DITTO.
      • The entire organization was led by one “Director”, You fail at life.
    • Behind the scenes
      • ...and is described as an “elite Republic intelligence agency that ‘does not exist’.” Death is not amused.
        • Methinks Bac dreams of his own personal fleet of MIB. -Solus (Bird of Prey) 02:26, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
          • Actually, what I really dream of is no more over-the-top FA reviews, but I guess that's why they call them dreams. ;) - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue (talk) 03:07, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
  3. Council of Seers vote What I could find...
    • History
      • Establishment
        • "in the name of a religion that told them to restore a balance between man and nature," Is there any information on this religion, such as the name?
          • There's no name other than the name of the deity, but that's not really relevant to this article. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue (talk) 03:30, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
      • Early Days
        • The second mention of "Hutt" should link to the species, rather than have it linked in the "Function" section.
    • Overall
      • Interesting article. Seems like a sort of shadow government agency to me. Trak Nar Ramble on 03:25, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
  4. Council of Seers vote GenoHaradan forever.
    • Possible contradiction in Establishment: "These groups were not considered a threat to the Republic, although it kept a close eye on them" Okay, the sentence itself is fine, but in the intro you mentioned that Sector 13 kept an eye on it specifically, not the Republic. Yet, at this point, you haven't yet mentioned the creation of the organization (that's the next ¶). Please address this.
    • Plot question: Why does the organization only answer to the Chancellor yet some officials know about it? Doesn't that compromise its mission? I mean sure, it's your story so you can say everyone saw the organization as acceptable for the greater good, but we both know that, in reality, some would say otherwise.
      • I couldn't really tell ya. If I were to venture a guess, however, I would also relate it to reality. While certain people cry about it, we've had covert elements of the government such as the CIA assassination program that was recently revealed, as well as the wiretapping program. The president may be the head honcho, but you can't run something like this without more than one outside person knowing. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue (talk) 04:04, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
        • Yeah, okay. We'll have to wait and see. –Victor Squishy Vic (talk page) 04:07, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
    • The ranks don't really need to be in quotes in Organization since they're actual titles, but I'll digress. Up to you.
    • Behind the scenes has those curvy quotations/apostrophes around that quote. I suggest you be consistent and use the standard ones.
    • That's it.–Victor Squishy Vic (talk page) 03:55, 19 July 2009 (UTC)

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