CS:CC-5666

This is the review page for the ongoing good article nomination of CC-5666.

Objections

 * 1) *Infobox
 * 2) **Hate to burst your bubble, not a single Fett clone was made until 32 BBY. So how is this guy around with Fett's template? Unless it's different in your fanon. Either way, how did he die in 37 BBY yet the Battle of Kranth took place in 19 BBY and therefore 10 months prior would be 20 BBY? Please clarify birth/death dates. Makes no sense.
 * 3) **Make "clone" lowercase.
 * 4) **Link to Male
 * 5) **Affiliation is Galactic Republic, even if he's in the Grand Army. Grand Army would be a subaffiliation, but that doesn't go in the infobox.
 * 6) *Introduction
 * 7) **"nickname Concord by his mandalorian instructor." Mandalorian is capitalized (and link to it), plus, who is he? Give his name.
 * 8) ***Side note, why Al Capone? That's so misplaced and if you could come up with your own names for clones, why not for an instructor?
 * 9) **"commanding the 123rd Clonetrooper Platoon" FYI, you need to adjust your article accordingly; "Clone trooper" is two words, not one, and it's not to be capitalized. Neither is platoon – so, don't only fix this on your article, but move the page accordingly.
 * 10) **"on a CIS fortification" What's CIS? No context whatsoever, not previously mentioned. Comes out of nowhere and worst of all, is an acronym. Give context.
 * 11) **Try combining your last two sentences, they'd flow better.
 * 12) *–Victor  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|15px|link=starwars:Alliance to Restore the Republic]] ( talk page ) 04:28, 17 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) *–Victor  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|15px|link=starwars:Alliance to Restore the Republic]] ( talk page ) 04:28, 17 May 2009 (UTC)