CS:Alternative Star Wars Saga

This is the review page for the ongoing featured article nomination of Alternative Star Wars Saga.

Objections

 * 1) Heh.
 * 2) *Infobox
 * 3) **In tradition of alphabeta order, The Alderaan Affair should come before Chosen One. Unless it's by release date, which of course is understandable.
 * 4) ***I was doing it by release order, yeah. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue.png (talk) 19:52, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Oliver should come before Solus in the editors, per alphabeta order.
 * 6) **Again, applies to the writers section (alphabeta)
 * 7) ***This was done with the two current founders in alphabetical order, then the other two writers in alphabetical order. I'll change it if you insist. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue.png (talk) 19:52, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) ****Up to you. It doesn't bring down the quality of the article so it's not a big issue. –Victor Squishy Vic.png (talk page ) 19:53, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **I know the above may seem like preference, but I'm basing it off your own. If you're going to do it at all, which you did in a couple sections, keep it consistent.
 * 10) ***Is this just a comment in regards to the previous objection? I'm assuming it is. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue.png (talk) 19:52, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) ****It is. –Victor Squishy Vic.png (talk page ) 19:53, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) **How come the Chronicles series isn't mentioned in the infobox?
 * 13) ***In the infobox, I only put stories that are actively in production. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue.png (talk) 19:52, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) ****Ah, alrighty. –Victor Squishy Vic.png (talk page ) 19:53, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) *Intro
 * 16) **"and the recently announced" Article doesn't reference a date. If this article were to remain the same in 2010, then it would no longer be "recently". Please adjust this to give a time frame or something like "the latest work" or something instead.
 * 17) **"the overall feedback as been largely positive." 'as' to 'has'
 * 18) *SVS
 * 19) **Please cut down most of the info from this section. It has nothing to do with the ASWS aside from part of the first and last paragraph. Having it the way it is now also deters focus from ASWS since SVS isn't even part of it and doesn't even connect with what was established in the intro/infobox (due to not being part of it). So yeah, please remove probably the entire central paragraph and focus on the relationship SVS and ASWS did have. This is an outstanding objection.
 * 20) ***I removed the central paragraph and cut down some other stuff, but what I left is for contextual purposes. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue.png (talk) 19:52, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ****Read it, it's fine now. EDIT: Oh wait, also, please italicize all mentions of Squishy Vic Series or SVS. Thanks.–<font color="#C33">Victor Squishy Vic.png (<font color="#E33">talk page ) 19:53, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) *More later. –<font color="#C33">Victor Squishy Vic.png (<font color="#E33">talk page ) 19:45, 21 June 2009 (UTC)

Comments

 * I'll review this later. - Joe   (talk) 19:27, 21 June 2009 (UTC)