Thread:Sebolto/@comment-104549-20200107035813/@comment-1998339-20200107130215

I'll have a more extensive list of thoughts once I work through the latest installments more slowly on a second read-through. Some brief initial knee-jerk reactions&mdash;I loved the Brokkodds (no surprise there, I suppose), I think you handled the pacing of Zaella's progression towards the light side masterfully with just enough angst & internal conflict to make it believable, I'm annoyed that Kenza still doesn't get enough screen time, & I think Jirdo Yushari is one of the more relatable characters in the series possessed of some great redemptive potential (Service Corps members never get enough love in canon literature & fan fiction alike).

I enjoyed getting a more comprehensive picture of the Tapani Jedi situation in Revenge. You did a good job of tacitly setting up Vinton Kaivalt as the source of the intelligence leak, given his abrasive personality & obvious paternal anger at Gaebrean's decision to join the strike team. It made some sense that he would want his wayward son & the Tapani sector more generally to avoid needless destruction in a Sith invasion. This misdirection ultimately made Wisté's betrayal even more unexpected, since he wasn't even on my radar as the potential mole (I wasn't sure about the respective allegiances of Kobold & Amaani).

I kept waiting for the nuclear warhead to serve some purpose. The frequent offhand mentions of its explosive potential that saturate Moments & Revenge seemed to suggest that the weapon was going to play some role in the latter installment, but so far the bomb's been a red herring (I personally assumed some baradium-flavored tragedy was going to befall Inimă Eserzennae in the team's absence). I assume you have something planned for the bomb in future.

Out of curiosity, do you have a name for the war in which the series is set? As you know, the New Sith Wars are broken down into a number of smaller campaigns given names like the & the. I don't think you've ever given the conflict a name, but I might have missed it.

Anyway, I'll have more thoughts once I complete my more comprehensive read-through.