Thread:Sakaros/@comment-3436482-20200127211623/@comment-3436482-20200211041000

Alrighty I'll go point for point here.


 * 1. Right I try to keep an eye out for that kind of thing. Sometimes I get mixed up.


 * 2.Okay.


 * 3. Yes I plan on filling in the blanks as I go. I'll be taking the time to fill those in later, since there's a lot to cover. I'll probably do it before I complete the entire article since it'll be a long one


 * 4. Another thing I tend to slip up on while writing. I can go over and fix that.


 * 5. Not sure what the problem with that is but it's not a big deal to change either so I can do that.


 * 6. I do tend to refer to collectives as groups instead of individual entities, hence using they to refer to the Empire instead of it. For Eigy i purposefully use they to denote that the droid has its own distinct personality but remains genderless. That's more of a preference in writing style if that's okay.


 * 7. I smack myself every time I mess that up. For some reason I sometimes totally blank on the I before E except after C rule


 * 8. I hope that's not too much of an issue since I do like laying things out like that. If it is then I can try to reign that in.


 * 9. Sure I can go through and fix a bunch of that.


 * 10. As for poking at canon, I generally only do so when I feel I can get away with it. For Ren being a descendant of Revan I feel that's okay since it hasn't been entirely established in canon what his lineage is or if it even exists, so I can expand on that area that has very little actual canon content. As for Mace Windu, we of course know of his unfortunate defenestration by lightning, but there have been so many theories about how he actually survived the encounter, and since as far as I'm aware there is no body and according to The Senate himself that means he is not dead then I would lile to take a bit of liberty with bringing him in. Generally if I poke at canon I try to make it believable so as not to snap established canon in half. I hope that's okay.

As far as Ren being able to master both Light and Dark, this too I feel is an underserved area in canon, and there have been tons of interpretations on how the two can be used and what kinda of people are capable of walking the edge between. I might be reaching for a bit more artistic liberties in this area, but as far as I'm aware it is a possibility, or at least it hasn't been officially declared an impossibility. I hope that's okay too.

If there's anything else you want to point out or if you want to respond to any of the above then I'll be around.