User blog comment:Brandon Rhea/THE CHOSEN ONE: First four chapters released!/@comment-3528596-20120929175659/@comment-20644-20120929185509

Wow, I'm loving these incredibly detailed reviews so far. Awesome!

As for your point about the dialogue in the bar scene resembling the scene on Taris, you are the first point to get that! That was definitely where I took inspiration from for the hiccuping drunks.

I'm glad you like the scene with Owen too. I'm really happy that I've gotten a lot of positive feedback to that. I don't have a brother, I have a sister, so I can't write brotherly scenes from experience. Originally I was going to have more dialogue, but I decided to keep it shorter and really just have Michael talking at Luke, save for a few bits of dialogue from Owen. I figured that would work better. Glad I was right!

Thanks for the review. Feel better!