Talk:Raian Keldabe

Couple issues
First of all, there is no neutral Point of View (POV) here, which is mentioned in the SWF's Manual of Style. Using terms like "powerful" and "great" as adjectives to describe your character are broad and imprecise. Be careful with your choice of words. Also, there is a sense of drama in the writing: "19 years after the end of the Clone Wars, the Empire encountered it's greatest foe; the Rebel Alliance." Articles shouldn't be dramatic: SWF strives for an encyclopedia-like writing style, meaning that information is clear-cut and precise in what it takes about. There are a few grammatical issues here and there, too. --れび (talk to Lavi!) 02:58, September 8, 2010 (UTC)