User talk:Atarumaster88/Archive 2

Re:Infobox
It's not mine, but I've used it enough to where if you give me the link I can take a look at it. - Brandon Rhea 03:59, 20 July 2007 (UTC)
 * That's odd. I don't know what's wrong with it. By the way, do you have IM or MSN? I want your opinion on the first part of the next chapter. - Brandon Rhea 04:16, 20 July 2007 (UTC)

Force Exile II
All right. I'll look for a good sunrise image. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  16:54, 17 August 2007 (UTC)

Bac Novel
Chapter Eighteen. - Brandon Rhea 02:52, 21 August 2007 (UTC) Thanks for reading. If I may ask, why did you think Ravinos would be defeated? Was it the way I developed things earlier? If so, I'm glad. It gives it an unexpected twist. As for the cold and vibrant, it's supposed to be cold in feel and vibrant in sight. - Brandon Rhea 01:32, 3 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Hey Brandon, didn't want you to think I'd been ignoring you, I've just been a bit busy and haven't been on wikis much. I will certainly take a look at it when I have time. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:39, 28 August 2007 (UTC)
 * Finished reading Eighteen. Interesting developments in the plot, to be sure, with Ussej's fall to the dark side and all. The whole work had been setting up for it so far, so it's about the right period in the novel for him to fall. Him falling after being defeated was unexpected. I thought Ravinos would be defeated, yet convince Ussej anyway. However, there were some contradictions in the descriptive paragraphs, particularly in the beginning part with Ussej's thoughts about the room. How can something be vibrant and cold. They don't add up. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:30, 28 August 2007 (UTC)
 * The Legend of Ussej Padric Bac: Prologue - Pho Ph'eah has been rewritten. I think you'll enjoy the added detail and the fact that I used an idea from Solus about making it a flashback. - Brandon Rhea 05:32, 8 September 2007 (UTC)

Perfectly understandable. Take your time. - Brandon Rhea 16:05, 10 September 2007 (UTC)
 * I apologize for not looking at the new revisions, as I have had an extremely busy RL that has prevented from contributing heavily to Wookieepedia, much less SWFanon. However, I will definitely have a look at it (as I also try and finish Force Exile II) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 14:35, 10 September 2007 (UTC)

Picture Work
I am definately interested in seeing what your looking for and hope that I can give you something that fits your vision, just let me know what it is that you're looking for  N.Y.N.E. Comlink 17:08, 5 September 2007 (UTC)

Bac
Hey, have you been able to read the new prologue and the new chapters 1-3 yet? - Brandon Rhea 14:16, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Just finished reading the new prologue. On the whole, much better and a much better lead-in for the series than it originally was. There is definitely an improved sense of flow and the flashback lends itself better to the overall timeline of the novel.

A few things:
 * "Causing a plethora of damage" reads a bit funny.
 * The word atmosphere is missing "The ship entered the Pho Phe'ahian and flew"
 * Check your italics, because my word processor does the same thing to me- I have to recode all those italics marks
 * "Torpedo launchers and blaster cannons decorated the side of the ship, methinks
 * If the Pho Phe'ahians have nuclear reactors, why do they live in small villages? This is kind of a major sore point for me, as most agrarian communities don't use that type of large-scale power- if "nuclear" refers to fission, then we're talking large scale plants. Fusion, of course, would be a different story, but I haven't seen any indication that it is being referred to.
 * Montrose's next to last words have a misplaced quotation mark at the end of them.
 * Codes in their hands and the Supreme Commander dead.

Anyway, those are pretty much all small things and it reads much better. I'm sorry to say that I won't be able to give Ch. 1-3 the time they deserve until I release the next segment of Force Exile II, which is quite honestly giving me fits, even though it's finally nearing completion. But, rest assured, I will read them eventually. Atarumaster88  ( Talk page ) 15:28, 20 September 2007 (UTC)

New Chapter
The Legend of Ussej Padric Bac: Chapter Four - Downfall is up. Also, thanks for the feedback above. - Brandon Rhea 19:25, 25 September 2007 (UTC)

Force Exile
I've heard you mention it, but I didn't realize it was here (I assume you're implying that it's here). I'll keep an eye out for it. - Brandon Rhea 19:42, 28 September 2007 (UTC)
 * I'm reading the first part of Fugitive right now. They're pretty long, so I'll read them as quickly as possible. - Brandon Rhea 19:50, 28 September 2007 (UTC)

One thing I immediately noticed is that there's a present tense goof in I believe the second paragraph. It says something like "It is the third year of the Clone War" rather than "It was...". - Brandon Rhea 19:58, 28 September 2007 (UTC)
 * If it's a different style you are aiming for, then far be it for me to say change it. I just figured it was a typo. Also, thanks for the review on the Chapter 1 talk page. - Brandon Rhea 00:23, 29 September 2007 (UTC)

Re:Reviews
I've had a few Fan Fic writers over on TF.N read and comment, but it's usually along the lines of "awesome" and I'm left think "well....?", so that's a little annoying sometimes. Since you're really the only Fan Fic writer that's taken the time to do reviews like this for me, it'd be rude for me not to respect your opinions and take that time and consideration. At first, since I wasn't used to getting reviews like this from Fan Fic writers, I was a little turned away by the fact that you went in and got every little detail you could find, and this was despite me knowing that it's purely optional and subjective as any review really is. Then I realized that no one would take the time and effort to try to improve a story if they didn't think it was really good and didn't think it had an amazing amount of potential. That's why I ultimately went back and started this third draft. As for my vision of the tale, that was the one thing that I immediately thought of when I read the review for Downfall and you mentioned how not much of the battle was actually shown. That's because more of the battle will actually be shown later through the means of the main characters thinking about what happened. Damien will be showing thinking about things from his end and Remer will be thinking of things from his end, etc., and you'll learn a lot more about what actually happened. Also, I'm still reading away at Force Exile. Once I'm done, I'll do sort of a massive review of it. - Brandon Rhea 05:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * I understand where you are coming from on that- while SWFanon is the first place that I've posted Force Exile, the number of people who are willing to sit down and read the work both critically and for enjoyment is quite small. As for the review, I suppose years of writing in school and as well as being an Inquisitor on Wookieepedia have only honed my critical eye, and as the novel seemed to be the most prominent fan-fiction work on the site, my curiosity was piqued, especially since you said you were looking for feedback. If you had said, "don't tell me if it's bad," I would have understood, but probably not have read it. ;-) I'm impressed and looking forward to the third draft of the novel (Which really needs a catchy acronym to redirect to, because that's a pain to search for! :-P). Once again, I appreciate your open-mindedness when it comes to taking criticism, and keep up the good work.

With that perspective, the battle's coverage makes more sense, but the big thing that was galling me was the Sith went from being in space to a couple blocks from the Senate with barely any exposition and then Damien is taunting Ravinos and stuff happens and then the Republic gets whipped. I dunno- I was lost on how they got to the surface in the first place. But yes, the idea of using flashback on parts of it makes more sense, so you might not need as much. And I look forward to your review of Force Exile. Atarumaster88   ( Talk page ) 20:46, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * The Sith were already on the surface. That was implied when the dead Supreme Commander was mentioned. If you remember back to the revised Prologue, the Pho Ph'eah stuff was "one year ago" in a flashback, but the "present day" segment of it was Ravinos getting the codes to the Coruscant defense grid and killing the Supreme Commander of the military. Also keep in mind that Ussej and Estamme got to the battle late, so the Sith had already gotten to the surface. - Brandon Rhea 20:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Ah, that clears up a lot. That's what I get for reading the prologue a couple weeks before I read part 3. Never mind then. ;-) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:03, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Indeed. - Brandon Rhea 21:37, 7 October 2007 (UTC)

Downfall
I saw it when you first posted it. I haven't been able to go in and make the corrections yet. Thanks for the reminder, though. - Brandon Rhea 03:53, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Chapter Five
Here. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  16:21, 19 October 2007 (UTC)

Judgment Call
Sorry I wasn't online. Was it anything I can still help with? - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  02:22, 31 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Well, basically, I am at a point of decision in writing the final bits of Force Exile II. With each part that I release, I try to keep it around 20-30 pages for the sake of the reader, but the last part of Force Exile II that was released was 35 pages- a bit long for an FE segment. Anyway, I have about 23 pages of content in 2 chapters right now and the story has plenty of steam left- the final climax is still coming. So, I could keep going and safely release around a 40 page part of the story, or I could count on the climax being nice and long and release two 20-ish page parts of the story separately, leading to a seventh part of the story. I'm not sure what to do- I was good about the 20-30 page thing in Force Exile I, but Force Exile II is a lot more complex in a variety of ways. That's all. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:05, 31 October 2007 (UTC)

Chapter Six
The Legend of Ussej Padric Bac: Chapter Six - Saarai-kaar. It's a bit short, but I think you'll like it. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  13:37, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Chapter Seven - The Jedi Way has also been posted. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  17:29, 2 November 2007 (UTC)

Responded. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  18:37, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Rest assured, I will get to them, but I need to finish the next segment(s) of Force Exile II first. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:26, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Read and reviewed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:00, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

Quote
Oh, thought that it sounded familiar. Should've figured it had something to do with Janson. Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles 01:03, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

IRC

 * Can you un ban me from wookieepedia IRC?TroybAllSpark Quest contribs[[Image:MovieBlack.JPG|10px]] 18:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * That would depend on why you were banned, who banned you, and how long ago it was. I'll need a bit more detail before I can act on that. If you would prefer to communicate confidentially, e-mail me at Atarumaster88 (at) wookieepedia.com. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 5 November 2007 (UTC)


 * Well, I think it was havac, happend last night. Becuase..I cant remember.TroybAllSpark Quest contribs[[Image:MovieBlack.JPG|10px]] 22:58, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * That's so not good enough. We have very specific IRC rules, and I'm not going to un-ban you for no reason for breaking them. Moreover, it will likely have to be the banning admin who un-bans you due to some new administrative policies on Wookieepedia. I will look into it on IRC and try to get the admin's side of the story. Continued questioning of me on this matter can and may be interpreted as harassment on your part. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:03, 6 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Discussion with Darth Culator in IRC reveals that you were spamming and were warned about it repeatedly. As such, I'm not unbanning you from IRC, nor will I tolerate any further comments on the matter. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:14, 6 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Ok, but I did give tem a link to the only preview on the new star wars clone wars TV series coming in 2008. Also ataru, new cis was voted GA, what do ya think on that.TroybAllSpark Quest contribs[[Image:MovieBlack.JPG|10px]] 00:45, 10 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Honestly haven't read it a long time. So I really have no opinion. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 05:53, 10 November 2007 (UTC)

Cover
Eep. I forgot. I'll be busy today, but I'll start work on it immediately. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  20:49, 6 November 2007 (UTC)

Chapter Eight
Chapter Eight - A Night to Remember - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  02:24, 7 November 2007 (UTC)
 * ...and Chapter Nine - Secret of the Battle Lords. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  20:14, 7 November 2007 (UTC)

And if all that wasn't enough, Chapter Ten - In the Pale Moonlight is now up. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  03:40, 11 November 2007 (UTC)

Hello

 * Hey Ataru, I'm trying to find out how to create a Darth nihilus mask, Could you find a site of how to create one? Ive looked.TroybAllSpark Quest contribs[[Image:MovieBlack.JPG|10px]] 15:19, 14 November 2007 (UTC)
 * I would have no idea of where to even start looking if Google is not able to find it for you, sorry. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:20, 14 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Its ok, I have the costume, I just need the mask. Do ya know anyone on wookiepedia who has created one? I recall seeing someone using a pic of them wearing a Nihilus mask for a pic on their user page.TroybAllSpark Quest contribs[[Image:MovieBlack.JPG|10px]] 15:28, 14 November 2007 (UTC)
 * Troyb, I do not know and am not going to spend my time browsing Wookieepedia for that. If you want to do that, be my guest.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:54, 14 November 2007 (UTC)

Downfall
You'll be pleased to know that I'm rewriting Downfall (AGAIN). I'll be expanding the battle and spreading it all out over two chapters instead of one. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  06:39, 16 November 2007 (UTC)

I had a lot of spare time today...


So I finished v.1.0. If this doesn't show up, it's because the site's been acting weird. This is not a practical joke. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  19:44, 17 November 2007 (UTC)
 * I am very glad you enjoy it, Ataru. You are very welcome, it was a pleasure... and I didn't know I wasn't nerdy in RL. :P - Solus (Bird of Prey)  17:55, 18 November 2007 (UTC)

Downfall
I have an idea for Downfall and how to clean it up, and I'd like your opinion. The fight between Damien and Ravinos is pointless and I'd rather not have them fight so early, so I'm thinking of taking that out. I'm also thinking of taking out the part where Remer defends the Galactic Senate and show it in the next chapter that Remer is in (ie, Chapter Twelve) as a flashback when Remer is thinking about it. What the new version of the chapter would be is just the stuff with Ussej and the stuff with Laili. I already have written, for Ussej, something reminiscent of Episode III in which Ussej fights his way with Gold Squadron to the Sith flagship and then fights Brenos. After he gets onto the ship, it switches to Laili on Corellia at the academy. This way, there's less transitions and a whole big battle doesn't have to be written with multiple people. Let me know. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  17:44, 16 December 2007 (UTC) Looking at what? Nothing new for Downfall is posted yet. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  05:11, 18 December 2007 (UTC) Ah, lol. Go right ahead. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  05:13, 18 December 2007 (UTC) Interesting idea. I'll think about that. The only thing, though, is that I'm not sure if I want to have Damien and Ravinos fight anyone until later chapters, but maybe I'll have them do something. If I do decide to keep a part like that with Damien and Ravinos, I'll probably split it into two chapters so there's not a lot of jumping back and forth. I'd make the parts with Remer (you seem to have combined "Remer Ather" to "Rether", lol), Damien and Ravinos Chapter Four, and then the parts with Ussej, Brenos and Laili Chapter Five. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  05:34, 18 December 2007 (UTC) New chapter whenever you're ready: The Legend of Ussej Padric Bac: Chapter Eleven - Visions of the Future. I'm also still reading away at Force Exile, but it's really long. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  01:22, 19 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Looking at it right now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 05:08, 18 December 2007 (UTC)
 * I have to check the article again to remember what it looks like. ;-) And I was going to look at the others too, unless you don't want me too. :-P Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 05:12, 18 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Ok, I reminded myself of how Downfall flows, and here's what I would do: I'd leave the Laili and Ussej bits. I'd also keep the Rether parts- I think it's important to show the reader the front lines, if you will, and switching perspectives helps give readers an idea of the panoramic nature of the battle. Damien's part, I change. I would give him his own section, where he's meditating during the battle or something, and that can reveal his backstory in more character-oriented way rather than just having the narrator do it. Then, once he's located Ravinos, he can go hunting. An even better tie-in might be that he's using Battle Meditation, and when he goes to get Ravinos, Rether's lines waver and falter. I dunno if you want to take that direction, but that's what I would do. Anyway, I have faith in your judgment. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 05:30, 18 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Uh, no excuses. I'm sheepish, but not too apologetic. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 05:58, 18 December 2007 (UTC)
 * You review all of these chapters but forget the one with le secks? Psh, shame on you! - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  04:27, 19 December 2007 (UTC)

Hey, it happens. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  04:39, 19 December 2007 (UTC) Actually, I would. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  05:01, 19 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Bah! Bah, I say! Just what I always wanted to read: Fanfic sex. 9_9 Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:35, 19 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Okay, seriously now. I did view the history log for that chapter and I didn't think a whole lot has changed. Stylistically, I'm opposed to including explicit content- i.e. sex- into fanfic, just as I'm opposed to using strong profanity or incredibly shocking scenes, so I wasn't going to review this one. If you'd like to discuss further in IRC, I'm there now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:43, 19 December 2007 (UTC)

New Chapter
The Legend of Ussej Padric Bac: Chapter Twelve - A Lost Love is up. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  09:40, 3 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Duly reviewed and noted. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:27, 8 January 2008 (UTC)

Re:Osc..uh, (haha) I mean...award
Yeah, no problem. It's quality stuff, and it's too bad that more people haven't read it. Let me know whenever you post your review of Chapter 12, since you posting a review always seems to slip past me somehow. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  06:17, 6 January 2008 (UTC)

Another Novel
Hey, I'm working on another novel in my Alternative Saga along with the Bac novel. It's called Star Wars: Episode I - The Chosen One, and it'd be great to get some feedback on it from you since most of the feedback I get is on TheForce.Net in the form of "Great! Looking forward to more!", so I need by trusty critic for this. If you get a chance, take a look and let me know what you think. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  07:34, 11 January 2008 (UTC) Damn spacebar....- President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  23:14, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Well, for starters you should probably change the first line in your promotional forum. It says "Star Wars: Episode I - The Chosen One is fan novel", which is somehow not what you wanted. :-)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:12, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Yes indeed. I was actually referring to the lack of an "a" in between "is" and "fan". Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:15, 11 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Oh, that explains a lot. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  23:16, 11 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Hey Brandon, just wanted to let you know that while I did read over the new chapters of your novel that you've posted so far, I won't be making this one a regular read. Please understand that it has nothing to do with your writing skill and everything to do with a dislike of Episode I, even a vastly altered rewrite of Episode I. The parts you wrote were well-written, and the only things I noticed were a few minor grammar errors and some characteristic Rhea phrases. TBH, the Prologue caught my attention the most, because it had almost nothing to do with Ep. I- a good thing. Anyway, I'm just basically not a fan of that general story, so my dislike of the story is due to personal tastes alone.


 * Well, you don't really need to worry about that. If you want to take my word for it, once they get off of Utapau it's going to differ a lot from the original Episode I. There will be a brand new, original chapter in a few chapters or so as well that has nothing to do with the original Episode I. So, again, take my word for it - you don't have to worry about it being all that similar, because my I-III are going to be drastically different (specifically Episode II). As my disclaimers always say, all I can do is HIGHLY suggest that you keep an open mind and see where it leads. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  00:23, 12 January 2008 (UTC)

And now for a bit of humour: "I'd certainly be more than willing to take on this roll again if you guys want me to. &mdash;Brandon Rhea."


 * Were you hungry or looking at bread when you wrote this? I imagined you fighting a rather large dinner roll when you wrote this. :-P Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:13, 12 January 2008 (UTC)

Actually, you have no idea how big that roll was. But, have no fear, I buttered that thing to death. Apparantly, I'm now a god in the wheat fields. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  00:23, 12 January 2008 (UTC) Well, I do think you'd enjoy the new version of the novel. Yes, Jar Binks is a new Jar Jar Binks who is actually not stupid and will prove to be pretty cool. Yes, there are Gungans, but they aren't stupid either. And yes, there is a Trade Federation, but things aren't going to go down like you expect them to. The beginning was basically kept to be very similar for the sake of being familiar to readers, but it's going to change and theres going to be some interesting Alt. Saga mythos thrown in to go along with this. I really do think you'll enjoy it, and I hope you give it a chance since I've come to rely on your reviews (NOTE: No, I am not pandering). So, if you are interested, there will be another chapter out tonight (look for "The Chosen One: Chapter Four - Otoh Gunga") that will be similar yet different at the same time. Darth Maul also has some fun in it. Anyway, yeah, I do have some reading to do. I'll be done with Force Exile I within a weeks time, and then I'll start on Force Exile II and then get to Force Exile III. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  22:53, 12 January 2008 (UTC) Awesome. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  02:50, 17 January 2008 (UTC) I think it's very good, as does everyone else who's read it. Hopefully you feel the same. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  07:15, 19 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Lol, funny. Anyway, I'm still leery of the other novel. Besides, don't you have some reading to do? :-P Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:56, 12 January 2008 (UTC)
 * I shall take a look at this new novel, but first I must finish with the next segment of Force Exile III. It has some . . . stunning and unexpected events within it that I cannot reveal, but let's just say I've been waiting to write this bit since Force Exile I. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:47, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Okay, I've finally finished with Force Exile III, Part 2. Now I can read this other novel, but it better be good, Rhea! :-P Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 07:13, 19 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Finished reviews of the prologue, Chapters 1 and 2. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:56, 19 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks. I responded to all of them. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  18:06, 19 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Yes, I saw- been watching RC. Now all you have to do is finish reading FE! Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:09, 19 January 2008 (UTC)

Indeed. I'm just going to print it all out, since it'd be easier to read that way. Let me know when you're able to read and look at Chapters Three, Four and Five as well. Chapter Six should be up today or tomorrow. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  18:12, 19 January 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm reading Chapter 3 atm. I'll get to the others a little later. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:15, 19 January 2008 (UTC)
 * In regards to Force Exile I and II, I can send you a print version if you want to provide an e-mail address. I'm online in IRC right now if you'd prefer to maintain privacy. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:58, 19 January 2008 (UTC)

I don't mind, just let me know when you send it in case it doesn't come through: philyeagles92873@yahoo.com - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:00, 19 January 2008 (UTC)

Re:Notification
Yes, please send it to my email when you get the chance. &mdash;Grand Admiral J. Nebulax (Imperial Holovision) 12:11, 11 January 2008 (UTC)

Re:IRC
I'm here now if you still need to talk on IRC. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  20:23, 18 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Alrighty then. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  20:34, 18 January 2008 (UTC)

FE III cover
Yes, of course. Shoot. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  01:16, 19 January 2008 (UTC)

Hmm
"Despite the apostrophes."

- You

I don't follow...- President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  07:14, 19 January 2008 (UTC) Ah, yes. Now I follow. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  07:24, 19 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Lol, several times when I review something from the LOUPB, I find apostrophe errors.  So, I'm saying that the writing is good, even though the grammar nazi in me goes nuts whenever I find those. On second look, there weren't as many of those as I thought. They just stand out to me as annoying. But no, seriously, it's good stuff.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 07:21, 19 January 2008 (UTC)
 * I give up. Let me know when you get a chance to read Chapter Five. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  04:07, 20 January 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm back. And finished with my review. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:18, 20 January 2008 (UTC)

Read, fixed up and responded to. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  04:25, 20 January 2008 (UTC)