Star Wars Fanon:FW/Acceptance

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Acceptance
Nominated by: Katana Geldar  02:31, 26 April 2009 (UTC)

Nomination comments: I was very, very impressed by this story by Squishy Vic. It depicts a side of the Jedi Order that we know about but is rarely shown. Quite a personal story of "failed Jedi" Narod Antrell. I realise that this novel is not yet complete, but by the time it makes it on the queue to be a FW it will be.

Excerpt

 * The sunbeams downed onto the Coruscanti fields below, filled with crops, scarefauna, and, of course, the farmers that worked so devotionally. The large, productive farmland belonged to the Jedi Order, to their Service Corps branch. Specifically, the farms belonged to the Agricultural Corps, where Jedi younglings who were not selected by the age of thirteen by a Jedi Master — therefore not becoming Padawans of the Jedi — would have to go to work, to continue serving as petty associates of the Jedi.


 * Unfortunately, this was the case many young teens, of all genders and species — the Jedi Order, though, suffered little, as such younglings were usually regarded to as failures and nothing more by their peers and even themselves. Most of the younglings didn't even know why they failed, they just knew they did, and were left with that. A depressing feeling of failure and total loss to carry with them for the rest of their time, all thanks to a heedless Order of Jedi.


 * Narod Antrell in particular felt lied to, betrayed, and saddened by his so-called failure. He was a fairly short, dark-skinned Human male, with scruffy black hair that couldn't be combed down, a big shaggy mess. Narod remembered a bit of his childhood, especially from his time as a Jedi youngling. He barely remembered when he first was taken from his family on Dantooine to Coruscant, but he clearly remembered when he was promised that he'd become a Jedi. Narod was bitter, angry about the entire situation, since he had trained in the Order relentlessly for over a decade and, in the end, was sent off to be a farmer, and nothing more.

Objections

 * 1) In case anyone notes, the current upload of the novel is at under 50,000 words (just barely in the 40,000s area). But rest assured that three chapters are currently pending upload and a final beta cleaning, and the novel is now at approx. 59,000 words. As well, Katana pointed out an error of paragraph repetition which I have resolved, so please ignore that. –Victor  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|15px]] ( talk page ) 05:10, 26 April 2009 (UTC)