Thread:General B.H./@comment-31050517-20190914003144/@comment-31050517-20191003161457

Hey sorry I’ve read it but been real busy with school so I’ll give you feedback here. I love the overall concept of it, for instance the different perceptions of each character and how it’s formatted like a movie script. However I think that Jaber’s line, “what’s going on FAM” is a little too much like what human teens would say on 21st century Earth. Not in Star Wars. But otherwise I enjoyed the interactions between Shawn and his sister. Let me know when you’ve read Ryloth Under Siege.