DL:Battle of Nar Shaddaa (GDE/Legion)

Approve

 * 1) Meets standards. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  17:50, 23 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Better. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 23:44, 26 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) All right. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  01:53, 27 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Yeah…-- Squishy Vic HoloNet 209 08:46, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

Disapprove/complaints

 * 1) Expand Background, Prelude and either expand all of the sections in “The battle” or combine them into one, because as it stands their not detailed enough for individual sections. Also remove some of the images, because as it stands there are too many in too little a space. If you put a lot more detail into the article, the images would work, but as it is now it doesn’t. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]]  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  05:12, 2 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Per Brandon. - Solus  (Bird of Prey)  19:34, 2 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Per the above. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 22:36, 2 December 2007 (UTC)

"A freaky Sith droid who can use the force, at that." is also a pretty bad one, imo. I also saw MPK's comment, and I agree with it. I was simply referring here to the fact at how strong Tyler is always shown to be. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  17:25, 2 December 2007 (UTC) Prelude seems too short, so my recommendation would be to combine Prelude with the rest of the Background section to make it one longer section. That way, you don't have to worry about expansion. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  17:46, 19 December 2007 (UTC) My final criticism for this article before I vote for it: expand the Aftermath section a bet. I mean, when you have two clearly powerful characters coming together and dueling during a battle that can be compared to the Battle of Coruscant in Episode III, then there should be one hell of an aftermath. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  08:24, 23 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Even though it's not against standards, I do have to point out that the quotes on there are pretty bad. Featured articles are supposed to represent the best of Star Wars Fanon, and those quotes make this seem like a joke article, or at the very least one that's not to be taken seriously. I'm not knocking your work or the effort you put into this, to be sure, because I know how hard you guys worked on it. I just wanted to say that. Also, and this is more a beef with the end of the story, I really don’t understand how a “Force sensitive battle droid” would actually have a lengthy duel with a Super battle droid. Tyler is always portrayed as being so incredibly strong, and we’re talking about the Force and a lightsaber versus a droid with guns. Let’s try to be realistic here, shall we? - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  05:12, 2 December 2007 (UTC)
 * I'll discuss the quotes with Tyler when he comes back. Personally the only quote that I think needs reworking is the one at the duel section. Well, me and Tyler tried to make the duel bit balanced so it didn't seem biased to either of our namesakes. And not everyone thinks Tyler would win, Rhea--check the article's talk page. Unit 8311 17:20, 2 December 2007 (UTC)
 * I've been expanding the sections a bit, but the image placements look perfectly fine on my browser. Unit 8311 14:43, 3 December 2007 (UTC)
 * I've greatly expanded all sections. Is it ready now? Unit 8311 16:38, 19 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Done that. Unit 8311 19:29, 19 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Uh, Rhea, I just wanted to say something about your above comment "...at how strong Tyler is always shown to be". I know I always show him as being strong, but I never said he always wins. Lah D'ar was able to get at him. So was 8311. He lost two battles. The only thing I consider "strong" about him is his lightning, lightsaber skills, and the Shriek Jedi duel, and maybe his close ties with the New CIS . Besides, it doesn't even really matter if I show him as being strong and intelligent. I mean, Sherlock Holmes is shown as being strong and intelligent too. Oh, and Rhea, I'm not meaning to start a fight, so please don't take this as an insult, I was just explaining why Tyler is portrayed as being strong.&mdash; Darthtyler http://images.wikia.com/swfanon/images/1/18/Scuba_Diver.gif Talk 21:25, 19 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Aftermath expanded. Unit 8311 14:56, 23 December 2007 (UTC)