User blog comment:Brandon Rhea/Star Wars: The Tragedy re-release/@comment-67.173.77.213-20100321032308

The new content really adds a new level of depth to this short story. It makes this Tragedy much more emotional which helps it achieve the very thing that this title hints at. The original story didn't provide much of an emotional hook and it, to me, didn't seem like much of a tragedy. It felt like some mysterious guy dying after a short time of inner-reflection/character development.

This is where the new content adds some clarity to who he was and removes some of the mystery, which I felt hindered the story in its original incarnation. Too much mystery destroys a readers emotional stake and immersion in it.

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I liked the whole idea you presented with Bac joining this story. The back story and the emotional tug-of-war you mixed into their dialogue and descriptions really helped this story out. It turned it into a FW nomination instead of a run-of-the-mill shorty, like most short stories.

A Sith Lord that someone needed to stay alive was something I had not seen bar RotS. I liked that and I liked that you made Bac feel conflicting emotions and love for his fallen friend despite the latter's many flaws and character problems. The emphasis on the apocalypse that would come if Plagueis gave in, was applauded. Much improved over the last version. Good Job.