Forum:Decreton Lords - SECOND Featured Article Review


 * See Forum:Decreton Lords - SECOND Featured Article Review/Archive for the reviewed articles that maintained their FA status.

Due to the creation of new, stricter Featured Article requirements, it is important that the Decreton Lords once again take the time to issue any complaints they have about the current Featured Articles and decide whether or not an article should remain as a Featured Article or become a Formerly Featured Article. Please be sure to sign everything you say, including complaints and whether or not you wish to revoke Featured Article status so that we know who is saying what. Please be sure to repeat complaints, as it’s important that all Decreton Lords have their voices heard.

Also, please be aware that there is no immediate rush to do this, so don’t feel as if you’re being pressured into reading into reading dozens of articles right now. While you can certainly take your time, don’t take that as an opportunity to wait a long time. While we don’t need it done immediately, it’d be nice to have it done relatively soon. The articles to review are as follows, separated into the categories they fall into on the Featured Article main page. - Brandon Rhea 00:32, 6 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Intro is only 163 words and the titles under the History section are incredibly long and stretch the table of contents far too much. - Brandon Rhea 02:32, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Complaints have been rectified. - Brandon Rhea 00:08, 10 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Intro looks rather short when you compare to the actual article. And as Brandon pointed out, the way-too-long titles under history section are annoying. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?
*Yes. Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles 14:35, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Though there are only two minor complaints, yes until these complaints are rectified. - Brandon Rhea 02:32, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Due to the rectification of my complaints, I withdraw my "yes" vote and submit a "no" vote. - Brandon Rhea 00:08, 10 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Sorry, but yes until the complaints are fixed. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Gack. Come out of retirement to see my masterpiece under fire. You will pay. Dearly. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  23:35, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * There. Fixed. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  23:59, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Nope. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 21:43, 10 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:58, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Intro seems a bit short, but then again, that might be just me. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Intro is too short (but only by six words, so that should be easy to fix), lacks detail in "Prelude" and the initial two sentences of "Conflict erupts" (the ones just before "In Orbit") should either be expanded or included in "In Orbit". - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Intro's 217 now, so it's fine. Expansion in Prelude. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:46, 9 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:46, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:38, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * Intro has been expanded, prelude has been 'detailed', and the sections of "Conflict erupts" and "In Orbit" have been combined. --  JM  76  Ask   Archives  [[Image:Sabersmilyjm76.jpg|20px]] 01:03, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * No complaints. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * The pictures at the end of "To Rid One's Self of Burdens" and all of "Mercy Killing" are far too clumped together on my widescreen computer (so it'll only be worse on a fullscreen one) and the table of contents doesn't make much sense. The entire first section is "Pre-Battle", but then the second section is "Aftermath". It needs to be broken up so readers know when the Pre-Battle ends and when the Battle begins. - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * I could get rid of a pic or two if this gets to be a big problem. Besides that none. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:38, 8 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Nope. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:39, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:37, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * No image problems for me. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:37, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * No complaints. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Aftermath requires expansion, but only by a paragraph or two. - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Nope. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes, but I have a feeling this will quickly become a "no" as Aftermath will probably be expanded fairly quickly. - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Nope. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:47, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:35, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * Aftermath expanded. --  JM  76  Ask   Archives  [[Image:Sabersmilyjm76.jpg|20px]] 01:03, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Intro is too short. I counted 8 links - perhaps that's a bit too few for a featured article. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Keep in mind, Jack, that the community voted on new FA requirements which included requiring only one link to Star Wars Fanon. - Brandon Rhea 21:36, 7 October 2007 (UTC)


 * Intro is too short. Pre-Battle, Gaining power, Learning of the Attack and Aftermath all require expansion. The pictures are unorganized and some are (literally) right on top of one another.
 * Per the above. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:56, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Intro is too short. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:34, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Per the majority of the Decreton Lords votes, this article's FA status has currently been revoked until complaints are amended.


 * Yes. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:56, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:34, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Too short intro. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Intro is too short. Prologue, The battle, the Second Wave and the Space Battle all require expansion, as does Aftermath. The pictures should also be smaller to avoid being so close together. - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:58, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:33, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Per the majority of the Decreton Lords votes, this article's FA status has currently been revoked until complaints are amended.


 * Yes until fixed. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:58, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:33, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * No complaints. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Intro is too short. Conquering the Sith, Start of hostilities, Appeasement, Invasion, The third year, New Ally? and Civil War all require expansion. The pictures need to be smaller to avoid being so close. "Jedi Masters Kyle Katarn and Luke Skywalker battle three Sith Knights" is so big that it leaves a big white space in the article.
 * Per the above. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:08, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Brandon. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:39, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Never! --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 21:59, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yep. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:08, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:39, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * Now this is what I would call a featured article! Long article, has lots of details...just awesome. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 21:09, 7 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * None. - Brandon Rhea 23:20, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * None. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:15, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * None. This is a great article, just like Shikkri. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:56, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. - Brandon Rhea 23:20, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Nope. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:15, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:56, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Legacy, Personality/Traits and Talents all require expansion. Legacy should also address how she was remembered. Right now, it only says what happened after her death. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * None that I can think of. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:49, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Tiny bit of expansion in Personality/traits and Legacy, though not enough to revoke status IMO. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:29, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Nope. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:49, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:29, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Post-mortem should be expanded to include a legacy (ie, how she was remembered). Personality/Traits and Talents should also be expanded. And though it has nothing to do with the FA requirements, the massive quote in the middle of Clone Rebellion should either be at the beginning of that section or reworked to become part of the history rather than a quote. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * None at the moment. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:58, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Brandon. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:27, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:58, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:27, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Intro is less than 200 words, every section requires expansion and a Talents/Abilities section needs to be written. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:19, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Minor expansion needed throughout. Intro needs expansion and Death and Legacy need to broken into two sections (Death, Legacy). Add Talents section as well. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:26, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yep. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:19, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:26, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Every section before the title "A Sith Crusade" requires expansion. The only ones after the title "A Sith Crusade" that need expansion are "Collapse of the government" and Operation Wayward. "Lightsaber" and "The Force" in the abilities section should also be expanded, because as it stands the list under that section is a lot longer than the sections themselves. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * The above and two redlinks. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:30, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No complaints from me. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 19:57, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No offense to Jasca, but are you kidding me? - Brandon Rhea 20:30, 15 October 2007 (UTC)


 * Per Brandon and NKSCF. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:39, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:30, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 19:57, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:39, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Stroke of luck, Bad Blood, Confrontation, A Mutual Agreement, Battle of Lehon, No Survivors and The End? all require expansion. Personality and traits, as well as Talents, could use some as well. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * The above and&mdash;this is just me being nitpicky, so please disregard this if you want&mdash;the article, when you're editing it, always had two spaces instead of one between the sentences. Not the biggest problem in the world, but, meh, whatever you want to do. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:38, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Like Shizu Lanmaw, a bit of expansion in most sections is needed. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:24, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:34, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yep. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:39, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:24, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * The intro is too short, but only by three words so that should be easy. The first section of Biography and then Early Life, The First Step, Abuse of Power, Lady and the Tramp, Repercussions, Training on Coruscant, Conflict of Interest, When Love And Hate Collide, Assassin, Union of Darkness, The Road to Nowhere, Reunion, Personality and Talents all require expansion.
 * Per the above and the same "problem" Exemplar deals with. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:46, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per above. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:23, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:38, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:46, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per NKSCF (Unfortunately, yes). -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:23, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Sith Crusade and Between the Wars could use expansion, as could Legacy and Personality and Traits. - Brandon Rhea 23:40, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:52, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Sith Crusade, Legacy, Personality and traits all require expansion. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:22, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:40, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yep. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:52, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:22, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Intro is far too short. The first section of Biography and then Escaping Roon, Betrayed, Overthrowing the Dark Lord, Zao tenj War, Battle of Korriban, Post-Korriban and Personality and traits all require expansion. The article is also lacking a talents section. - Brandon Rhea 23:43, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above and one redlink. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:55, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Introduction is too short. The beginning of the biography should be "Early life" or "discovery" instead of just directly under the biography. Red link(s) must be filled in. There is a spacing issue after the section "Training to become a Sith" because of the template Clear, which needs to be removed. Zao tenj War, battle of Korriban and Post-Korriban sections need major expansion. Personality and traits could also use expansion, and a Talents section must be added and made detailed. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:21, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:43, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:55, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:20, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Battle of Tanaab, Droid Followers, Settling back on Agon 9, Hunting for the Factory, Duel on Nickel One, Skirmishes with the Rebel Alliance, Trouble with the Galactic Empire, Peace on Agon Nine, all of the sections in Large battles with the Rebels, all of the sections in New Confederacy of Independent Systems, all of the sections of New Republic, Duel with Adrsti, In Control of the New CIS/GDE, Personality and Abilities all require expansion. Traits should also be in the Personality section. - Brandon Rhea 23:47, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above and three redlinks, as well as it failing the MOS repeatedly. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 15:04, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Just a question, how is it "failing the MOS repeatedly"?&mdash; Darthtyler Talk 20:10, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * When you write the headers, it's supposed to be like this: ===Tyler's Reign or Whatever=== (without any information, such as a quote or anything else) and then ====Stuff that Happened==== (with information) What was written was something in tune with this: ===(Header Name)=== (with information a quote in one instance) ====(Other Header)==== Also, you cannot have links in the section titles. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 20:19, 11 October 2007 (UTC)


 * Has a few redlinks. The final section "In Control of the New CIS/GDE" needs to be expanded. Abilities and traits needs to be renamed as talents and needs to be expanded. Personality needs to be Personality and traits and needs expansion as well.

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:47, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 15:04, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:16, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Every section before " Change of Alliance" requires expansion. The sections after it that require expansion are The End of the Empire, Yuuzhan Vong Invasion, Post-War, Second Corellian Insurrection, Exiled, The Final Years, Powers and Abilities and Traits all require expansion. - Brandon Rhea 23:50, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 15:09, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Powers and Abilities should be renamed to Talents. Traits to Personality and traits. Article lacks Legacy section. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:13, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:50, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 15:10, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:18, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. - Brandon Rhea 15:50, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:13, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * Bah. Expanded every single section before "Change of Alliance". Also increased/combined sections below that. --  JM  76  Ask   Archives  [[Image:Sabersmilyjm76.jpg|20px]] 01:03, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * All sections in History require expansion. Articles about wartime Jedi Master's should not have only a few paragraphs per section with two or three sentences in them. This can be a lot more detailed. - Brandon Rhea 23:53, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above and two redlinks. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:28, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per above. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:08, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 23:53, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:28, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:08, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Intro is too short. A few of the section titles are far too long (Ex: The Sith Order of Decreto and the Battle of Had Abbadon (59 ABY)). Early military career, Hiding from the New Republic, In charge of an Empire, Conflict with UN-8311, Appearance and Traits all require expansion. "Traits" should become "Personality and Traits" with information about the personality and there needs to be a Talents and Abilities section. - Brandon Rhea 15:03, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * The above and four redlinks. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:35, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per above. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 15:03, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:35, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Order 65, Exile, Vader's Prisoner, Endor Mission, and Personality and traits all require expansion. There also needs to be a Talents and Abilities section. - Brandon Rhea 15:05, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Dunno really what I should write on personality and traits, as, IMO, those sections do not provide any useful info really - those just make the article bigger, and well, quite frankly, boring to read through the same stuff again and again. And considering these articles are based on the (sometimes quite short) photonovels of mine...not much to write about. --Jack Phoenix (Contact) 19:34, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Regardless, it's a requirement for FAs and all FAs need to live up to it. I'm sure you can come up with something detailed. - Brandon Rhea 20:27, 11 October 2007 (UTC)


 * Per the above. Also they were some problems with tense. Cutted instead of cut and the like. I don't know if they're any more, since I got rid of most of them. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:40, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * There is no early life, and that is not useless information, so it should be added and made detailed. Several sections need to be expanded. Also, there should not be any links in section titles as with Order 65; remove it and integrate it into the article. Most other sections should be expanded, and there needs to at least be a cliffhanger ending for his death, then add legacy or post mortem or both. Also, talents needs to be added and Personality/trait needs a lot of expansion. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:05, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 15:05, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:40, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:05, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Imprisonment and discovery can be expanded some, as can Post mortem. There also needs to be a Legacy section, as Post mortem as it is doesn't talk about how he was remembered or anything like that. There also needs to be a Talents and Abilities section. - Brandon Rhea 15:08, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:43, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per above. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:01, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 15:08, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yep. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:43, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:01, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints
*Expansion is needed at the "Twist of fate 19 BBY", " Imperial attack 6 BBY", " Chase of the imperial "fugitive" 0 BBY", "Meeting the Rebellion", " Way of the Force 11 ABY - 2,949 ABY", and " A Fateful Death (2,951 ABY)" sections. Traits should be added to the personality section and a legacy/post-mortem section is needed. Three redlinks as well. Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles 14:58, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * There should only be one quote at the top, IMO. The "Main Article" templates should be removed and integrated into the article. ECHO Visor should only be linked to once in the biography, and in the same section it's linked to twice. There are unnecessary boldings under the "The awakening" section. Why is the main pic also in the bio? Either remove it from the bio or change the main pic to a unique picture. Also, post-mortem is mispelled post-modem. Personality and traits should be a level 2 section as should talents, they shouldn't be together under "Characteristics". Expand P&t. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?
*Yes. Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles 14:58, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 20:55, 13 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments
Just a note, Vic, alot of your complaints are personal opinions rather than rule violations. But I did everything you requested. You Speak, I've Spoken 15:59, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Basically everything except for Death requires expansion. - Brandon Rhea 15:13, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per the above. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:01, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
 * A bit of expansion in a all sections, specifically Manhood and Return to Concord Dawn. This includes personality/traits & talents. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 06:56, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 15:13, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:01, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 06:56, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints
*Per the above and their are at least 35 redlinks in the article. Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles 14:22, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Out of the Dark, into the Light, Falling in Love, General of the Insurgence, Venture into the Unknown, Selam's Life Debt, Final Battle of Placidus, The Exploration continues, Battle of Buuill and Conclave on the Vanguard could all do with expansion. - Brandon Rhea 15:12, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Most of those sections are meant to be short. There is nothing more to expand on in those sections; most of them are "starters" sections, to lead you on to what Narod did for that time (such as Exploration continues). As for the redlinks, I'll get to 'em. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:03, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No more redlinks. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:22, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * None. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:25, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?
*Yes. Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles 14:22, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 15:12, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:22, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Nope. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:25, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * None. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:33, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Just a tiny bit of expansion on Personality/Traits & Talents. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 06:04, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * The last three pictures should be spaced out a bit. Personality and traits and Talents and abilities can be expanded. I also hate quotes in the middle of sections, but that's not against the requirements. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:52, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:33, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 06:04, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:52, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints
*I will redo the talents/personality/traits etc. either later today or tomorrow. Most likely tomorrow. Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles 19:56, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * None. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:54, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Lacks era icons (only has FA star one). No offense to the artist, but the main image (although well drawn) looks sloppy on line paper. Perhaps someone could help you get rid of the lines and color in the main pic on photoshop or something, though this is not an FA issue, just a personal one. Anyways. The "For a more in-depth version of this look at:...." things need to be removed; such links could be placed in appearances or something similar. A lot of the sections should be merged; what I mean is a lot of the sections contain a bunch of one liners and no paragraphs, and I say these one liners should be merged to make paragraphs for neatness. "The Undead Live" is just a section of a bunch of quotes, way too many I think, and should be made into story/paragraph form. This occurs in various other sections too. Throughout the entire article, there are also a bunch of cluttered pictures. Some should be spread out, removed, or placed elsewhere in the article. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:57, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Vic. There are a lot of sections that simply need a lot more expansion. A lot of the quotes also need to be removed. A link to a page with quotes pertaining to NKS would be better suited. Also keep in mind that images should be organized in a left, right, left, right, etc. style. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:55, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 19:56, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:57, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:55, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Talents section is needed. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:58, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Talents needed. Also, some of the pictures are really small; I think those small ones should be at at least 200px in width. 150px just seems too small now. Also, the "See also" section is unnecessary IMO; those links are already in the article. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:51, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Growing up, Forging an Alliance and Talents should be expanded a bit to include some more detail and The After-Life could use some expansion as well. A few of the images, particularly Darth Teddy during his fight with Brut and "The spirit of Mancer Lord Grakon, prepared to enter Brutalidon", "The End of Darth Teddy" and "Brutalidon standing victorious with Darth Teddy's lightsaber" and then "The School of Hidden Wisdom on Baltimn" and "The swirling whirlwind of fire, engulfing the Jedi on Baltimn" are too close to each other on a widescreen computer, so they'd be really close on a fullscreen one, presumably. They need to be spaced out or some should be removed. The image "Dexon Kyjar, renewed with Brutalidon's powers of Mancery" should be on the right side in keeping with left, right, left, right, etc. A legacy section is also required. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:49, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * I blame the picture problem on Vic's advice. Fixing some/all of it now. Dexington 20:21, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:58, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:51, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:49, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments
I'm busy lately, I'll get it done when I feel like it. Dexington 19:30, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Contrary to that, I did it anyway now. Dexington 19:40, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Now all of Brandon's complaints are fixed too. Dexington 20:41, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Legacy? - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  20:51, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Post-mortem and abilities/traits need to be expanded. Specific categories are needed. I.e. Category:Jedi Knights and not Category:Jedi. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:10, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Armor/Weapons needs to go under and "Equipment" section, separate from Abilities. Abilities section needs expansion and to be renamed Talents. Also, though not a big deal, perhaps there should only be one quote at the top. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:50, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per above. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:57, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:10, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. This is a great article though, I like it. Could use some more Revan pictures though (since Revan is the greatest.) -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:50, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:57, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Not a major issue, but you could combine Legacy and Post-mortem, since they're basically the same thing. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:24, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Into the Unknown (0 BBY) seems a bit too short compared to other sections. Also, as NK said, Legacy and post-mortem can be combined, as it makes it a longer section. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:58, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:24, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:47, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes, but I'm sure this will quickly change. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  19:58, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Expand post-mortem. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:31, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Introduction is too short at 178 words and so needs expansion. Post mortem could use a bit of expansion. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:44, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per above. It also lacks a Legacy section. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  20:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:31, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:44, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  20:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Spacing problem. Several of the paragraphs are short, i.e. about one or two short sentences in length. A legacy/post-mortem section is needed. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:35, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Some sections could use a bit of expansion and details, since a lot of them are composed of a bunch of one liner sentences. Talents section needs expansion. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:45, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:35, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:45, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Post-mortem expansion. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:41, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * I expanded it a little bit, but nothing more happened than what is said (So nothing beyond that happened, and therefore, no Legacy is needed, just to let you all know). -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:35, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:41, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:35, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Spacing problems and the paragraphs are kinda short a lot of the time. Expansion is needed most everywhere. Post-mortem/legacy section is needed, along with a personality/traits and talents section. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:52, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Sections Leaving TSI and Obsidian Dagger Squadron are kind of short. When does this story end? Does not explain how he dies or lives out his days, just ends abruptly. Could use at least a cliffhanger ending, and add a legacy section at least. Appearance and personality need to be split into two different sections. A full Talents section needs to be added, and then the "Force Abilities" and "Lightsaber Use" sections need to be included in the talents. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:41, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Absolutely yes. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:52, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 05:41, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * I had to fix up a few things, so I no longer have any complaints. - Brandon Rhea 20:44, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * The only problem I have with this article is the introduction. The article is about Ussej II, not his ancestors. Therefore, writing about "his ancestor, Jonathan Bac, was the Supreme Chancellor. etc" The entire first paragraph of the intro includes this, when early life already has this. The intro should talk more about Ussej II and remove the ancestors thing. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:26, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * None. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:57, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. - Brandon Rhea 20:44, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:26, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Nope. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 14:57, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * I tried to look at this as objectively as possible. If anyone points something out that I missed, I'll be sure to fix it. - Brandon Rhea 20:44, 7 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints
*The only problem I have with this article is the introduction. The article is about Ussej III, not his ancestors. Therefore, writing about "his ancestor, Jonathan Bac, was the Supreme Chancellor. etc" The entire first paragraph of the intro includes this, when early life already has this. The intro should talk more about Ussej III and remove the ancestors thing. (same thing with Ussej II) -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:28, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * I had to fix up a few things, so I no longer have any complaints. - Brandon Rhea 20:44, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * None. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 15:03, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?
*Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:28, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. - Brandon Rhea 20:44, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Victor  ( talk ) 07:04, 16 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 15:03, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * I tried to look at this as objectively as possible. If anyone points something out that I missed, I'll be sure to fix it. - Brandon Rhea 20:44, 7 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Links in section titles must be removed, there are a lot of those. There also a lot of very small/lack of detail sections (Specifically under "Jedi Master" section, but there are others before and after). There are far too many of them and they need to be highly expanded upon and given more details. Legacy should be it's own section (with level 2 headers is what I mean). Alternate battles should go elsewhere, perhaps in behind the scenes since they aren't part of the "canon" biography. Personality and traits shouldn't be a list of things, they should be in paragraph form and detailed. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:35, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:35, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Red link right in the beginning of the intro. Why is one of the quotes bolded? (Not really an issue but still). I don't think bolding in quotes is necessary. Instead italicize (though like I said, this isn't really an issue IMO, just kinda bugs me ). Post mortem is extremely short, and just has a bunch of quotes together. Expand it and cut down the quotes or integrate it into paragraph form. Everything else seems fine. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:32, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:32, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * "The Holy War" can be incredibly condensed, as it talks too much about Ussej, Kalel and Isabella rather than the Bendu involvement in the war. "The Rebel Alliance" can be greatly expanded to include the battles that the Bendu fought in, as well as information on the reunification with the Jedi Order at the end of the war. "Path" and the sections within it should be expanded, as should the Religion, Pillars of Strength and Specialization. Proverbs of Ussej Padric Bac should be given its own page or a section within Bendu Religion and replaced with a blurb about them and perhaps a brief history on the Bendu page. - Brandon Rhea 17:45, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Path section should be expanded, religion should be expanded, red link(s) should be filled and unnecessary boldings (such as in the Behind the scenes) need to be removed. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Could you tell me where the red links are? My computer has color issues, so I can't tell the difference. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  12:03, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Sure. Under "The Rebel Alliance", the "Mon Mothma" link is red. I'd suggest linking it to Wookieepedia or not at all (unless you're going to write an article on her too). -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 21:28, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 17:45, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * Hooray for voting against my own article! - Brandon Rhea 17:45, 8 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * The early history under "Carden Mannux" to "The Millennium of Hiding" should be expanded with more detail. The section about the Galactic Civil War should also be updated with the new information about the war including the First Battle of Alderaan, the Battle of Endor, Bail Organa's escape from prison, the Sieges of Naboo, the Second Battle of Alderaan and then, finally, it would end with "Fall of the Lettow". A brief history about the events of the Earth Wars Trilogy should also be added to the history. "Government and Politics" and "Military" should be expanded and "Prophecies" should simply be a medium-sized blurb with a full link to Prophecies of The Skywalker. - Brandon Rhea 17:49, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Government, Military, and Prophecies should all be expanded. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. - Brandon Rhea 17:49, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * Hooray for voting against another one of my own articles! - Brandon Rhea 17:49, 8 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * The quote directly under the history needs to be moved under a section, not under the right under the History part. Prelude to the Order should be expanded. The Conquest Begins should be expanded. Subjection Wars should be integrated into the article and remove the "Main" template. Same thing with Sovereignty Campaign section/link/template. Remove unnecessary boldings under the ceremonies section. Locations might be expanded to talk about what each location held, who was there, how many were there and for how long it was owned, and also how it came to be owned. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Removed the quote under history. Prelude to the Order is suppost to be short. It's like an overview before to get to the meat of the subject, which was starting the Organization. The Conquest Begins is short for two reasons, one beign that it was never intended to be long, and two, I haven't finished the actual story. The "Main" templates were deleted, though I don't know why you don't like them. They were made for articles, after all. Sorry, but I'm not getting rid of the bolding under cerimonies as I think they're necessary to enhance the article. as for the Locations section, it's been expanded. [[Image:Xepeyon.JPG|30px]] You Speak, I've Spoken 16:45, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Well, as Brandon said below, bolding words does not enhance the article. As far as the "Prelude to the Order", I will accept your justification because I have a few sections just like that on Narod Antrell, the overview before the details. As far as the main templates goes, I only say to remove them because they could be integrated into the article. You don't have to put "Main: Article name here", because you could easily write it into the story like " Josh was a Sovereign Knight in the Order of Sovereignty. " -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 21:33, 17 October 2007 (UTC)


 * Prelude to Order needs to be expanded, and it most certainly can be. Many of the sections after that also require expansion such as Official Foundation, The Order of the Sons, Institution for the Order (3,921 BBY), [edit] Galactic Contact (540 ABY - 770 ABY), Contact with the Republic, Order of Sovereignty, Imperial Attack on the Sovereign Order and The Conquest Begins (4,040 ABY - 4,043 ABY). I also agree with Vic on the bolding of events and such. It's unncessary and does not enhance the article, as you said. As far as images go, the ones under The Conquest Begins (4,040 ABY - 4,043 ABY) are far too close together on my widescreen computer, so I would imagine they'd be way too close. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  16:57, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  16:57, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * After fixing up a few minor complaints that I went over in my head, I can find nothing else but I'll leave that to my colleagues. - Brandon Rhea 18:02, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Important figures isn't really necessary. But everything else is fine. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * I agree with you there. It has been removed. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  16:58, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. - Brandon Rhea 18:03, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * The following sections need expansion: Formation, Collapse, Disintegration, aftermath of Endor. Remove links from section titles. Also, remove out-of-universe content; Legacy era is out of universe, and the like. Enemies and rivals could each use more expansion. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Vic. The pictures also need to be spaced out some and they need to be organized in a left, right, left, right, etc. fashion. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:10, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:10, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Perhaps add how long each leader led for (such as "Filose Naj (3869 BBY- 3840 BBY)"). -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yeah, the years could help. Some pictures could also be spaced out some. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:11, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:11, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * None. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Nope. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:12, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 07:53, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:12, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * What year does he encounter the Jedi Bendu? - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:12, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * None. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:55, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * The pictures could be spaced out a bit. Other than that, I've always loved this article but I have no idea why. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * I remember you once said that the main picture did it for you, when it was up for FA nomination a long time ago. -- Don Victor, Sr.  [[Image:Coat of arms of Mexico.png|27px]] ( Commission Room ) 21:34, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:55, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Under History, each section should be expanded to detail their use and battles, etc. Legacy should be it's own section apart from History and also be expanded. Behind the Scenes should be "scenes" (lowercase). -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:53, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Vic. This article not only requires expansion, but a GREAT DEAL of expansion. It looks like a bulleted list with absolutely no depth in the history. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:53, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Redlink in the introduction paragraph, must be filled in. The "Main" template should be taken out of the "Second Clone War" section and integrated into the article, and then the section needs major expansion. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:53, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Growth of popularity should be expanded and more information about Second Clone War should be added from the mian article, although you don't have to take the "Main" template out. I use it myself in some articles. Also be sure to get rid of that red link in the intro. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:53, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Intro is too short (185 words). Fighting style should be integrated into a "talents" section, along with in depth detail about the droid's abilities, equipment and tools. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:53, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Creation, Civil War, Return Home, Yuuzhan Vong war and Legacy all can be expanded. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:53, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Sorted the above. Unit 8311 12:29, 17 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * Would a droid actually say "Yay! A war! Just what I was built for!"? - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * The last line of the introduction would look better if it was merged with the paragraph above it. You should also add in a history of how this form came about and how it was taught to students, both light and dark. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:44, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * External links aren't really necessary. And I think since it is a Force power, it should be moved to "Force Shield". -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:44, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * None that I'm aware of. - Brandon Rhea 18:02, 8 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. - Brandon Rhea 18:02, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:44, 12 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

 * History could be expanded, but it's made up for in the description of each individual prophecy. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:44, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Indeed. If I expanded the history, the rest would be redundant and it would just be a list of the prophecies, basically. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  16:44, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Introduction is far too short. Under the objective sections, each game type could be described with more detail. History sections lack a lot of detail and should be expanded. "Great Jedi Purge" should be merged into the history, not be it's own section. Playing styles and techniques lack detail too, they should be expanded. Redlink in that bottom quote should be filled in/removed/replaced with Wookieepedia link. Team play section should be placed under the "Objectives" and explained in greater detail. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:44, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Vic. Every section in the article can either be merged with another or be greatly expanded. Right now, it looks too much like bullet points. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * Yes. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:44, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Complaints

 * Part of the first introduction sentence (The language of the Shapeshifters, Shikkri) should be reworded to say "Shikkri, the language of the Shapershifters," etc. (So Shikkri is first). Other than that, the article is perfect. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:44, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Done. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  02:10, 14 October 2007 (UTC)


 * None that I am aware of. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

Revoke FA Status?

 * No. -- Victor  ( talk ) 00:44, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
 * No. Though this article is primarily a list, it is a well thought out list and the amount of effort and obvious research that went into this article constitutes that it remain as a Featured Article. - President Brandon Rhea [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  21:00, 17 October 2007 (UTC)