Star Wars Fanon:FW/Legends of the Jedi: The Beast of Rutan

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Legends of the Jedi: The Beast of Rutan by MPK

 * Nominated by: Sup, yo. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 04:53, February 21, 2012 (UTC)

Excerpt
We came upon another anomaly as we left this group of tombs. Ten yards out of the circle they formed was another hole, this one not empty. I frowned in puzzlement as Euthsia and I stood on its edge and stared down three heavily decayed human skeletons, broken apart in places and their pieces mingling with each other. It seemed then that my disciple's speculation about the opened tombs was correct.

Euthsia looked up after a moment and glanced around, up at the sky which was now dotted with clouds, then at the empty field around us, its only feature the odd spindly tree, tree stump, or rock. I, however, continued to peer down at the age-old corpses. This time, it was I who was lost in thought.

"Euthsia?" I said after a moment.

"Master?"

"Do you remember when you asked me whether I believe that our objective is a man or a beast?"

"Yes, I do."

I looked up, stretching out again with the Force but still sensing no one else nearby. "I believe that the proper question would be, 'How much is it man, and how much beast?'"

Objections

 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) *That random bit of floating text that's broken out early in Part I really could use with being integrated into the main prose so it doesn't disrupt the flow.
 * 3) *More minor nitpicks to come on the grammar/spelling end of things. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 04:53, February 21, 2012 (UTC)