Talk:Gray Jedi Code/@comment-206.63.185.34-20160202232702/@comment-25836167-20160208052229

I like the effort, but don't approve of the execution. If you look at either of the other established Codes, there are no questions. They make statements. Many of the other lines here simply list aspects rather than connecting them. The Jedi Code establishes sets of opposites and favors one of the two in each set. The Sith Code establishes a single belief then lays out a progression to a goal. This is just kinda...there. The fifth line ("These are the...") just restates the purpose of having a Code in the first place and is redundant. I do like the seventh line ("Without ignorance...") but I think I addressed its ideas in the existing version, though not explicitly (mainly in lines 4-5, "Knowledge stagnates.../Power blinds...").