HP:Gladiatorial combat

=Gladiatorial combat=

Review
From the infobox: From the introduction: From “The games”: More will come for the following sections tomorrow.
 * The eras should be separated by bullet points.
 * “with different weapons against each other” - for some variety, I suggest changing “each other” to “one another”.
 * Should Afterlife be capitalized in this case?
 * There should be a comma between “Therefore” and “the idea”.
 * Inhuman should be inhumane because you’re not referring to Humans.
 * The entirety of Yuuzhan Vong War should be capitalized.
 * “New Republic era” is an out-of-universe reference and should not be referred to in the text of the article, unless it is in Behind the scenes.
 * You should refrain from including (editor) like that in parentheses. Instead, you should say “organizer or editor”.
 * “combats against each” should be “combat against each other”.
 * The sentence that begins with “Usually this winner” and the sentence that begins with “But he could be spared” should be merged together.
 * “In the later days of the Republic” - specify which Republic you are referring to.
 * “assigning” should be “assign”
 * There does not need to be a comma after “play” and before “and the actual”.
 * There should be a comma between “fights” and “musicians”.
 * “rather successful lives” should be the end of the sentence. A new sentence should begin with “Some were able to purchase”.
 * The sentence that ends with “defensive fighter types” and the sentence that begins with “whereas the little shields” should be merged into one sentence.
 * The sentence beginning with “Little shields always had an advantage” is rather long. You should find a way to shorten it or break it up.

Vote

 * 1) So far, I have to oppose because of the above issues. I plan to complete the review tomorrow and I'm sure that the author will be able to easily correct the grammar errors, because other than that it's a good read and I think it's of acceptable quality. - President Brandon Rhea  [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]] (Pressroom) (Record) 04:27, 21 May 2008 (UTC)

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