User talk:Ryluk Shouja/Archive 2

Do you think it'll be ok if i remove those improvement templates on the top of my page. I've done everything i can think of to fix them...so i'm just thinking that the person probably forgot that they put them up. --  Tesh  162  06:37, 5 October 2007 (UTC)

Please fix your images to be sourced properly. This is a rule that must be followed. See how at Special:Upload and for more help, see Template:Information. If you have questions, just ask me, but please follow these rules. Thanks. -- Victor  ( talk ) 06:05, 8 October 2007 (UTC)


 * No problem. -- Victor  ( talk ) 06:09, 8 October 2007 (UTC)

Thank you very much for indirectly teaching me that link trick (to make external links appear like regular links). -- Victor  ( talk ) 06:43, 8 October 2007 (UTC)

I know! that's the odd thing about it. Putting the entire URL works Even though you didn't mean to, thanks anyway for teaching me the trick on accident. What I mean is this: Regular link is for example Narod Antrell; external link is ; but, writing out the whole URL as you do looks like Luke Skywalker instead of. -- Victor  ( talk ) 06:46, 8 October 2007 (UTC)

Last night I did read a few of the articles you created (where I found the link trick). I haven't read your entire storyline yet though, just a few articles here and there. -- Victor  ( talk ) 19:10, 8 October 2007 (UTC)

Hey, Ryluk. How about yopu just get the logo when youcome over tomorrow. --  Tesh  162  14:37, 10 October 2007 (UTC)

I hate my dad's Comp. The keyboard sucks. anyway...yeah, just get the pic when you're over here tomorrow after youth group. --  Tesh  162  14:39, 10 October 2007 (UTC)

Tesh's pic
For now, until i can get a better pic, can you find a pic of a guy in black armor with two vibro-blades (black) standing before a dead body or other guy. You don't have to show the head, not until i get a better picture. Can you do that? --  Tesh  162  18:18, 10 October 2007 (UTC)

Black vibroblades. Like in the article. thanks so much! --  Tesh  162  18:29, 10 October 2007 (UTC)

np. and thanks again for the pic. This will do wonders to Tesh's page. Oh, and i really like the pics on Ryluk's page. Really adds a lot. God Bless. --  Tesh  162  18:43, 10 October 2007 (UTC)

Just to let you know. It doesn't have to show the head...so hair doesn't matter. God Bless. --  Tesh  162  18:55, 10 October 2007 (UTC)

You know what, first, restart the template, copy the code and paste it over the current one without modifications. Then, once it's saved, feel free to modify colors/names of spots, etc. That way you know if errors are made by looking at the history. If it still doesn't work, I can just create it for your from scratch, but first try out what I asked. I hope that helps/works. -- Victor  ( talk ) 07:15, 11 October 2007 (UTC)

You're welcome. -- Victor  ( talk ) 07:33, 11 October 2007 (UTC)

No problem. That's what I'm here for. -- Victor  ( talk ) 08:43, 11 October 2007 (UTC)

Funny thing
Thanks again for indirectly helping me out. I didn't know that "fiancé" was spelled differently for a man (fiancé) and a woman (fiancée). Thanks. -- Victor  ( talk ) 08:43, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

Indeed, writing sure gives us a lot more information to work with. --Don Victor  (contact)  09:44, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

No problem, it's deleted. --Don Victor  (contact)  21:55, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

No problem, it happens. Used to happen to me all the time and I'd be asking admins to delete a bunch of images/pages (before I was an admin. Now if I upload wrong stuff, I just delete it myself ) -- Don Victor, Sr.   ( Commission Room ) 06:07, 17 October 2007 (UTC)

The Fanon Menace
Should i put up the info about Season 4, 5, & 6 now or wait until you're done with the outline? --  Tesh  162  14:02, 20 October 2007 (UTC)

Images
I deleted one image but not the other because you are currently using it in your article. You know, instead of having images deleted, just upload over the old one. To do that, just go to an image, then go down until you find the link "Upload a new version of this image" (or something like that) and then upload it like a regular file. Then, just clear your cache (You don't always have do, it usual is refreshed quickly) and the new image should replace the old one. Just letting you know. -- Don Victor, Sr.  ( Commission Room ) 20:15, 29 October 2007 (UTC)

Tesh's page
Dude! I'm almost done with Tesh's page. Yeah, i gave up on trying to make it the second longest page on the site. I figured, once I'm done, all I have to do is get pictures. That's going to be the difficult part. I'm going to see if I can use my comic book pics for most of these, since very few are from the time period my books were written in. Anyway, So, yeah. I'm finally almost done, then I can work on The Pirate Wars, The Xian Conflicts and Zan's page, Hetur-an's page, Alura's page, the Alura's page, and Chin's page. Yeah, so I've still got a lot, but I'm a lot closer now. God Bless. --  Tesh  162  20:11, 17 November 2007 (UTC)

Well, Tesh's page is done, if you want to read it. I'm kind of pleased with the way i tied the Battle of Najiba in as the pivotal point in Tesh's life. Now to work on the other pages. The Alura's won't be that long, I'm almost done with it know. The Pirate Wars, yeah, that won't take long either. I'm not going to do the Xian Conflict, because there's only like two or three battles in it, which are all explained on Tesh's page and other pages related to the time period, so yeah. The big one will be the character pages. God Bless --  Tesh  162  10:05, 18 November 2007 (UTC)

RE:Ryluk Shouja
I do have some suggestions. The article looks great at first, but as it goes on, it begins to lessen in details throughout the biography. Unlike Wikipedia, there shouldn't be a separate portion in the biography for his personal life. It should be merged into the biography. Also, several sections could use more details and expansion. Such sections are "The Businessman", "As a Lord", and pretty much all those sections below it. Death should definitely be expanded upon, and you must add a personality and traits section of substantial length.

The equipment section looks fine, but perhaps you should merge the section "The Shouja Mansion" into the Equipment section, since it really shouldn't be it's own section. Lastly, I don't think the "See also" section is necessary at all, since those links you mention are already linked in the article, however, that's just my opinion. However, "external" links are not necessary at all. Remove that section, because linking to Wookieepedia is unnecessary and has no relevance to your character. That's pretty much it, mostly expand sections, add sections, and give detail. Nicely done so far though. -- Victor, Sr. HoloNet 209 07:33, 4 December 2007 (UTC)

No problem. Glad I could give suggestions and help out. -- Victor, Sr. HoloNet 209 07:41, 4 December 2007 (UTC)

I will review your article later tonight on it's respective talk page. -- Victor, Sr. HoloNet 209 06:43, 20 December 2007 (UTC)

Postmortem is for what happened immediately after death, and Legacy is the long term effects that occurred because of Ryluk. Both are required. -- Victor, Sr. HoloNet 209 20:08, 21 December 2007 (UTC)

I was finally about to log in. Delga's page is now complete. You may fire when ready, commander...oh wait. wrong place. anyway. I made Delga's page. You should be happy now. And Tyrus' is coming up soon. Oh, and i'm like fifty pages into Newfound Heir. --  Tesh  162  12:57, 22 December 2007 (UTC)

Answers
I saw the questions you asked Vic, and since he's not here I figured I'd answer them for you. Postmortem goes under the History section, while Legacy is its own section. You can nominate your own articles for GA, and if it becomes GA then it gets automatically nominated for FA. - President Brandon Rhea  (Pressroom)   (Accomplishments)  18:20, 23 December 2007 (UTC)

RE:
Merry Christmas to you too. And no problem, I am always here to help out! -- Victor, Sr. HoloNet 209 19:04, 25 December 2007 (UTC)

Ryluk's appearances
Ok. I thought I replied, but I guess I didn't. Yes. Ryluk appears in Newfound Heir. He is in all three of my books. --  Tesh  162  13:56, 13 January 2008 (UTC)

Re:
Thanks for answering my questions, appreciate the assistance. - Lost Soul 19:44, 23 January 2008 (UTC)

As you requested...
-- Tesh Vohore  Director of "The Fanon Menace" - Celebrating 3,000 views  15:49, 26 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Oh, and Ryluk. Just thought I'd tell you. I added something to the Behind the Scenes on The Fanon Menace, something I thought that you should see. Again, it's one of the least things we could do. -- Tesh Vohore  Director of "The Fanon Menace" - Celebrating 3,000 views  20:14, 27 January 2008 (UTC)

Ryluk
There are still sections that aren't large enough. I remember one section in particular that needed help. I think it was The Businessman, or some for thereof. Expand these and it'll be an FA. Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles 21:22, 30 January 2008 (UTC)

The Fanon Menace
Do you think we should make a category to put all of the Fanon Menace stuff in called ? Or at least something along that line? -- Tesh Vohore  Director of "The Fanon Menace" - Celebrating 3,000 views  08:03, 2 February 2008 (UTC)


 * I added the template to the main page, Season 1, and Part I scripts, then I got thinking. We should probably organize the scripts in subcategories according to season, and have each season page and the main page in the . What do you think? We can talk more tomorrow during school. -- Tesh Vohore  Director of "The Fanon Menace" - Celebrating 3,000 views  11:06, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Hey! I was wondering if I could use the Happy Skies Casino picture you have for Tesh's page? -- Tesh Vohore  Director of "The Fanon Menace" - Celebrating 3,000 views  18:22, 5 February 2008 (UTC)

Yeah. Well, I know you didn't copyright it, but I felt I should still ask. I might not use it for a while. Not until I can gather some more pictures. Thanks though. Oh, right. And I just love how my parents assumed I was going to the banquet. -- Tesh Vohore  Director of "The Fanon Menace" - Celebrating 3,000 views  13:49, 6 February 2008 (UTC)


 * And the sad part about that is...I would have known exactly who it was. -- ~ ...ok, fine. -- Tesh Vohore  Director of "The Fanon Menace" - Celebrating 3,000 views  14:09, 7 February 2008 (UTC)

Project Cruentus
Obviosly your not on very much but you are a good writer and I would love if you signed up! --Arav the Undersith (Contact Me ) (Battles I've Fought ). 09:01, 26 April 2008 (UTC)

TFM
To be honest...no. I haven't thought of anything. --  Tesh  162  23:41, 28 July 2008 (UTC)


 * Hey! Good to have you back. You can get the Season II page up whenever you can because the first ep of Season II won't air, in'sha'allah, until the 19th of September. Anyway...I knew that Ryluk was going up around that time, I just forgot that the 29th was your birthday...now you know why I don't expect people to remember mine. That's cool. Oh, and I was thinking...I personally am not going to nominate anymore of my articles (both TFM and my universe) for GA anymore, however if its relating to TFM, I'd gladly vote. I'm just thinking that with Season I as an FA, its got a rep here on Fanon now, and I don't feel that we need to try and get every season an FA status. God Bless. --  Tesh  162  13:40, 21 August 2008 (UTC)

That's fine. If you want to, it's your series too. I'm just not going to nominate. I'll support you in your decision, I just won't nominate anything. I feel like I've gotten a lot of fame (although its very little) with this series so I'm cutting back. Since I'm the one that uploads the vidoes I see all the comments, friend invitations, and such, and I feel like you don't get much credit. You realize in the past three months we jumped from 8,000 views to almost 17,000 views. We have people anticipating Season II, and although its nice to have fans...its a lot in a short time. I'm just going to be taking it easy and simply film, edit, produce, and upload videos for a little while, so don't expect me to be on Fanon editing or anything. I won't even be checking comments on Youtube because I'm just wanting to slow down. The past two weeks have really been hard. anywaym, God Bless. --  Tesh  162  18:21, 21 August 2008 (UTC) I'd sing the egyptian version of the birthday song, but I'm afraid both of us would die from the sheer stupidity of it. Anyway...I'm the only one that can wish you a happy birthday on here...so there. (I'm annoyed because I missed being the first one on facebook.) God bless. --  Tesh  162  07:46, 29 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Yeah, sure. By that time, things will have cooled down a little. But this series is really gaining popularity. Guess what did it? ADITLOAS. Everyone loved it. EVERYONE...anyway. God Bless. --  Tesh  162  19:55, 21 August 2008 (UTC)

RE: POV
Well, that is POV, because that's simply the view of the author (you, or whoever came up with that section title) and may not necessarily be the view of everyone, hence why it is called "point of view." The way to fix it is just to remove the POV and simply go generic with section titles; for example, instead of "Tribulations with the Empire," or something like that, I would put "Waging war against the Empire" or "Against the Galactic Empire" or something. I hope that helps. Sorry if it didn't, but that's really all I can do. --Victortalk 16:04, 8 September 2008 (UTC)

Category consensus
Please note that, based on the voting that concluded at this forum, sub-categories of Articles by Ryluk Shouja are no longer allowed. Please move any articles from subcategories, such as Characters by Ryluk Shouja, to the main category, so that said subcategories are deleted. Thank you. --Victortalk 01:01, 13 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Ah, I barely saw your latest message to me. Anyway, only mainspace categories should be relocated into the main one. Others such as "Templates by" and "Images by" do not have to because they are from different namespaces (Template and FIle namespaces, respectively). Only the categories for regular articles, such as (as mentioned above) "Characters by" or "Weapons by" etc. Sorry for the late response. --Victortalk 21:09, 15 September 2008 (UTC)

Ryluk Shouja article

 * Please make the necessary revisions as indicated on the Third Featured Article Review whenever you have the time. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:05, 14 September 2008 (UTC)

The Cleaner Guy
I know you have some time on your hands here and there, and since I'm never able to catch you in time...here's what I'm thinking. You know, The Cleaner Guy might be confused with a conjectural-joke article. Maybe we should move him to Da'h Cli'nar Guy just to make it seem more - I don't know - professional. What do you think? --  Tesh  162  12:27, 26 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Hey! You're not dead. Well, that's a relief. Anyway, I'll make the move after I get back from school. --  Tesh  162  04:34, 27 October 2008 (UTC)

Congratulations
The Fanon Menace: A Day in the Life of a Stormtrooper has become a good article. Nice work. :) --Victortalk 17:48, 26 November 2008 (UTC)


 * I've also nominated the article for featured article status for you. - Brandon Rhea (talk) (contribs) 17:52, 26 November 2008 (UTC)

TFM stuff
Ok, when (or if) you see this, go here and tell me what you think of the new look. I'm still working on it, but it's just feeling a lot better now. I think you were right. It was the long paragraphs and lack of pictures. Anyway, yeah. Let me know. --  Tesh  162  15:12, 30 December 2008 (UTC)

RE: POV template
Looking at it again, I can only really see a couple of minor POV instances:

The introduction


 * “It produced the finest laser cannons for…” – “finest” sounds POV-ish. That could be reworded to say “It produced what were regarded as the finest laser cannons…” or something along those lines.


 * “They managed to develop an experimental pistol which was highly effective and…” – “highly effective” sounds POV-ish. Again, that could be reworded to say “…an experimental pistol which was considered highly effective and…” or something along those lines.

That’s it. - Nacen (Talk page) 11:42, 18 May 2009 (UTC)

Welcome...Again
Hey! Welcome back...again. I see that you've made some changes to Ryluk's page...ok, so I glanced at it. Uh, I was wondering if you could take on the FA objections for Anakin's article seeing as I'm going to be ridiculously busy the next two or three weeks packing up my pathetic excuse for a life. :P Anyway, if you could do that, that would be great. But if you're still working on Ryluk's article, you can just let it set there and I'll pick it up in three weeks when I'm finally settled-ish. --  Tesh  162  13:46, 18 May 2009 (UTC)

Re: POV question
By referring specifically to who believed that he excelled in it. For example, you might say that "Ryluk's associates felt that he had excelled at hand-to-hand and melee combat, mainly due to the extensive martial arts training given to him by masters of the arts". - Brandon Rhea (talk) (contribs) 06:47, 20 May 2009 (UTC)

Re: Ryluk Shouja
Only one I can see is that "Talents" should be "Talents and abilities". Other than that, I need to give it a proper and thorough review. - Brandon Rhea  (talk) 00:12, 23 May 2009 (UTC)

RE:Skylkan Jouja
Looks fine to me. Greatly improved from when I've tagged it. --JediCommando (Talk) 20:05, 4 June 2009 (UTC)
 * I'm actually not an Eagle yet, I still need to write up the project report, but thanks anyways! --JediCommando (Talk) 20:17, 4 June 2009 (UTC)

Shouja Mansion
Although Ataru said that it's fine, another thing you need to do is create proper headers. The headers need to be placed like so:


 * == History ==
 * === Early owners ===
 * === The bounty hunter ===

Also, "1177 BBY" should be "1,177 BBY". Hope that helps. - Brandon Rhea  (talk) 20:53, 4 June 2009 (UTC)


 * I'll take a look at it and then ask one other user for you. Once I get that user, I'll remove the tags. - Brandon Rhea Rebel symbol Blue.png <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) 22:12, 6 June 2009 (UTC)