Thread:Sakaros/@comment-29301-20180903145046/@comment-104549-20181220043248

I've been kicking around ideas for how to make the plausibility more apparent. Adding more dialogue about the alchemy involved to either scene (9 or 12) seems cumbersome, like it would slow down scenes which function best on tension and pacing. I'm considering adding a prologue with Kai Latra as the narrative perspective, set either when Targere calls at the end of this chapter or right before Alecto picks up the poison. Kai Latra could grumble to himself (or even complain to Targere) about how hard it is even getting the poison right, let alone adapting it to suppress Force powers, let alone adapting it to work on dark and light siders alike...even as I write this I can almost hear his rant in my head.

Your thoughts? I'm definitely interested in improving the plausibility factor; I don't want readers to come away thinking "well-written, but narratively bad".