User talk:Atarumaster88/Archive 6

Review request
Can you please review Narod Antrell for me? He's been re-rewritten (as an update to the massive fanon cutting I did in recent months) and he should be up to FA standards again. If not, that's fine (I know you're busy with 3FAR too), but if you can, please do so on the talk page. Thank you, Ataru. --Victor talk 22:50, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm rather pressed for time at the moment/foreseeable future. Given that I've already reviewed this at least once before, I can't promise this any time soon. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:24, 1 September 2008 (UTC)

Force Exile Covers
How did you make the cover art, such as the art on and ?--Mattkenn3 02:05, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * To put it simply, I didn't. Those two particular covers were made by Solus, while Darth Nyne made the FE III cover. I picked the images, and they put them together in PhotoShop. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:21, 23 August 2008 (UTC)

They look pretty good. Thanks--Mattkenn3 02:25, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks and you're welcome. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:24, 1 September 2008 (UTC)

FA Review
I was wondering if you could look over The Fanon Menace/Season 1 again, when you get a chance soon, and let me know if there is anything else that needs to be done. I've gone through and tried to correct many of the things you stated on the Review page, however, I didn't know if there might be something new. Thanks. --  Tesh  162  09:47, 24 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I will get to it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:24, 1 September 2008 (UTC)

FFA
Oh migod mah articles become FFA! Ohnose! :P But seriously, nice work stripping the FAs. It's motivating and hopefully I will eventually make mah articles up to par. --Victor talk 04:08, 26 August 2008 (UTC)

FA review
On the note of FA review, I'm the go-to guy on The Fanon Menace for the next couple of weeks, as Tesh is at school and I'm not busy. So if you could let me know what the problems with the article are, I'll do my best to fix them. --Ryluk Shouja(The Mukhabarat 19:05, 31 August 2008 (UTC) Thanks for the review on The Fanon Menace/Season 1. Sorry it was such a long process, but your tips will come in handy later when we work on the Season 2 article. I don't know what Ryluk has in mind as far as nominations go for Season 2, but with your help, we can still make it into somewhat FA quality. --  Tesh  162  13:09, 11 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Okay. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:24, 1 September 2008 (UTC)

RE: That one WP article
Inowatyamean. --Victortalk 04:20, 6 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Task complete. --Victortalk 04:31, 6 September 2008 (UTC)

I did, and it was fixed immediately (the format). As for errors, only subtly (an image needed replacing). The rest is up to you! :P --Victortalk 04:39, 6 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Well, I'm just the messenger. Don't shoot meh! --Victortalk 04:43, 6 September 2008 (UTC)

Re:Objections and things
I don't remember you saying that to me, but I'll keep that noted. - Brandon Rhea (talk) (contribs) 16:35, 11 September 2008 (UTC)

Territorial War
I just corrected the objections to Great Territorial War, aside from the Mutually Assured Destruction one for the same reason as the instance in the Pho Ph'eah article. - Brandon Rhea (talk) (contribs) 19:22, 17 September 2008 (UTC)


 * By the way, right now I'm working on an article about Ussej that is sourced completely from SWRP role-plays, and that can be found here. You might be interested in seeing how bad of a character Ussej used to be and, if you follow the links in the References section, how terrible of a writer I was. - Brandon Rhea (talk) (contribs) 19:58, 17 September 2008 (UTC)

3FAR Review: Ryan Vex
Hey Ataru, you voted against Ryan Vex in the Third Featured Article review. I have rewritten and improved the article so it lives up to our current featured article standards; please re-review the article in question when you get the chance. As you know, the article gets de-FA'd on September the 25th. If you could re-review it before then, that would be great. Cheers &mdash;  JM ' 76 ' Ask Archives 01:11, 23 September 2008 (UTC)

Darth Haagen
Hey, Ataru. I've been working on an article for a few weeks now which I intend to nominate for FA status. While it's obviously not done yet, before I continue writing it, I'd like to know whether you think the currently finished sections are even close to having FA qualiity or if the article as a whole even has potential. I'm not asking for a full review, just your general thoughts on it if you have the time. Drewton  ( Drewton's Holocron ) 22:01, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
 * At a very quick glance, I would say that this has potential. I think you might draw some flak for having him created out of nowhere. I didn't read all the way through it, but this is certainly better than a lot of other Former FAs that I've read. If developed, tweaked and copyedited, I could see this go to FA. By the way, I've pointed in your direction about a Main Page redesign. Are you at all interested?  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:20, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks. It may look like a Mary Sue at first glance, but it won't be close to the one by the time it's finished. He has a lot of power, but he doesn't use it very well, and I'm planning for him to lose almost all of the battles in the "Second Jedi Civil War". He's actually kind of a pathetic Sith. Yes, I would be interested in redesigning the main page; I've actually been thinking about that myself. One of my ideas would be having a random spotlight for a few "promoted" fanfics and a random featured article feature. I'm also working on various Monaco skins which will be proposed and voted on for a new default skin. If you want to try what I have so far, I have a "Lightning" one and a test of how it would be if only the colours of the current skin were altered. You might be seeing it differently than I am if you have a different screen size. Drewton  [[Image:Era-old.png|20px]] ( Drewton's Holocron ) 23:33, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
 * The P&T and P&A are really what I look at to make Mary Sue judgments . . . what I read in the bio didn't seem that bad, aside from the unusual conception sort of thing-making life out of nothing is about as realistic as spontaneous generation, but this is a galaxy with planetary hyperdrives. On the Main Page issue, I actually have a pending proposal that deals with the promotion of fanfics that would necessitate a Main Page design, which is why I ask. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:49, 29 September 2008 (UTC)
 * He was created by Nihilus the same way Plagueis created Anakin. Anyways, your idea looks good; I'd definitely support it, and I've almost completed my main page redesign. Drewton  [[Image:Era-old.png|20px]] ( Drewton's Holocron ) 22:02, 30 September 2008 (UTC)

RE: Droid name
Sure. Give me tonight to think, and I'll get back to you sometime during the week (as early as tomorrow, if you're online). Give me another talkpage message if you want to discuss if via IRC and I'll try to drop in ASAP. &mdash;  JM ' 76 ' Ask Archives 03:25, 1 October 2008 (UTC)

Jedi Bendu
My promise has been kept. Order of the Jedi Bendu of the Ophuchi has been rewritten and fixed up. I rewrote the entire history section and then changed what you pointed out regarding the other sections. - Brandon Rhea (talk) (contribs) 22:46, 1 October 2008 (UTC)

RE: Featured Artice
Thanks for the reminder. Could you give me a link to the page, please? I've been away from the internet for two weeks because of my college program, and am at a public library using a 30 minute internet connection and don't have the time to search for it now. Thanks again. --Ryluk Shouja(The Mukhabarat 22:47, 1 October 2008 (UTC)
 * The page has since had its Featured Article status revoked, since you did not take proper action in time. You can find its list of complaints at DL:Ryluk Shouja. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:41, 1 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you, I'll get on that when I can. No promises about when it'll be done, just that it will eventually be done. --Ryluk Shouja(The Mukhabarat 19:08, 5 October 2008 (UTC)

Main Page redesign
I've finished a Photoshopped example of my redesign for the Main Page which would be necessary for the new FW feature. The top left image would be where the Featured Work would be, and the black top right space is, of course, for the Monaco ad. The QOTW has been moved out of the Community section. Drewton  ( Drewton's Holocron ) 01:47, 3 October 2008 (UTC)
 * The top box is interesting. It's sort of different&mdash;I would have expected that box to be below the Welcome to SWF header myself, but I think the most pertinent comments have been made on the image talk page; I generally concur with what's been said there. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:23, 5 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Yes, I'm working on another one, with more changes and an actual excerpt. Drewton  [[Image:Era-old.png|20px]] ( Drewton's Holocron ) 17:44, 5 October 2008 (UTC)

Featured work
Just read about featured work and it looks great, I'd be glad to be nominated for it. Katana Geldar  06:15, 6 October 2008 (UTC)

TFN
What's your username on TFN? Have I come across you before? Katana Geldar  09:44, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I don't have an account on TF.N. It's highly possible that you've run into me on Wookieepedia, otherwise I don't know. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 14:14, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Okay, I have come across you on the Wook though. Thanks a lot for the help. <font color="#008080">Katana <font color="#008080">Geldar  10:30, 18 October 2008 (UTC)

FW Scratchpad
Page looks good to me so far. =) -- Kathkira talk  06:22, 13 October 2008 (UTC)

RE: Excerpt
Sorry Ataru, had to go up north for a few days because my grandmother fell quite ill, so I haven't been home to write the chapter. I'll just finish up the snippet I've got and send you something by tomorrow though, no worries. Vagrant Lustoid (Talk) 03:45, 15 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Excellent, thanks for getting back to me. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:47, 15 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I sent you an email with the smallish excerpt, and was surprised to see you'd left a message after that to remind me so I just want to doublecheck that the email was right. I mean, atarumaster88@wookieepedia is ridiculously easy to remember, but just wanted to double-check. Vagrant Lustoid (Talk) 00:20, 17 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Replied on your talk page, but I didn't get it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:23, 17 October 2008 (UTC)

Featured Works icon
I told Vic that the trophy looked best. Sorry I was detained elsewhere till just after you both left. -- Kathkira talk  23:54, 15 October 2008 (UTC)


 * Hey Ataru, feel free to set up Star Wars Fanon:Featured works, as your proposal passed. --Victor [[Image:Vic sig logo.png|15px]] talk 18:41, 17 October 2008 (UTC)


 * I've started bringing everything online. I'll have that done this weekend, hopefully, but Mediawiki:Sitenotice needs some updating. As far as I'm concerned, things are to the point of being workable, just not fully finished. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:56, 18 October 2008 (UTC)

Congratulations
Congratulations on becoming a member of the featured works board! the successful proposal of your new board. -- <font color="#000001">(talk) <font color="#000001">(contributions) 19:12, 17 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you. Now the work begins.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:02, 18 October 2008 (UTC)

Short explanation, please
I don't mean to take up your time, but it just occurred to me that I don't know/remember why you resigned from your position as a DL. Was it something straight-forward, like time constraints, or something else? If you'd satisfy my curiosity, I'd appreciate it. -MPK (MPK's Talk Page)|undefined 21:41, 17 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I believe this forum has the answers you seek, or at least the answers you seek in a form palatable to the community. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:02, 18 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks. -MPK (MPK's Talk Page)|undefined 18:12, 18 October 2008 (UTC)

Icon
You can find the era icon for Featured works under "fw". - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 01:43, 18 October 2008 (UTC)


 * I'm actually going to move it to just Category:Featured works. A month (or two, I don't remember) ago, we there was a community vote where it was decided to take the "Star Wars Fanon" out of categories like this. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 01:46, 18 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Okay, thanks. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:47, 18 October 2008 (UTC)

You're welcome. Also, I might have asked you this already, but did you want a namespace for the review board? - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 01:53, 18 October 2008 (UTC)
 * You asked, and I answered in the negative. The way I've set it up, we won't need one for this little experiment. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:54, 18 October 2008 (UTC)

Ah yes, I remember now. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 01:55, 18 October 2008 (UTC)


 * Also, if you want, I see things on your to-do list like "set up archive" and "set up queue". Just to make sure you don't have to do everything yourself, would you like me to set those two pages up? - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 01:57, 18 October 2008 (UTC)
 * If you would like to set up the queue, I'd appreciate it. I have some special ideas in mind for the archive that involve porting some specialized code, so I'll deal with that. Thanks. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:00, 18 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Sounds good, I'll get on it. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 02:02, 18 October 2008 (UTC)

A few minutes of your time
Hey, Ataru. I'm writing a story; if you could come on irc for just a few minutes, I have a couple of questions I'm interested to know you opinion on. Thanks. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 01:03, 20 October 2008 (UTC)

Actually, I have to leave now so I'll just ask you here. I'm writing a story similar to Prison Break, but in Star Wars, of course. AS a setup, I'm having the main protagonist, who's a bounty hunter, get hired by the Rebels to kill a general. He kills the general but is captured by the Empire. He is taken aboard the death star. And he plans escape. Do you think I should write a short story leading up to a book (my main focus is the death star escape), or write a book describing the events leading up to the protagonist's capture and then write a sequal to it? Thanks. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 01:28, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I just logged into IRC, and just got this message. EDIT: I'm completely unfamiliar with the television program you describe, so I'm unsure I'll have any useful advice along those lines. To be honest, I would suggest writing what you want to write, and the story that you want to tell, and not what you think I would like best. I'm sorry if that's not as helpful as you might think, but I try not to advise people on what plot to choose. If the plot revolves solely around a single character, it would probably be easier to write a lesser amount of content, as that would be easier. In my experience, most novels have more than one plotline, so writing a novel with only one would be difficult (but not necessarily ). Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:33, 20 October 2008 (UTC)

I have this worked out now, but thanks anyway. And no, I wasn't planning to have just one plotline; the one I described above is simply the main one. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 21:18, 22 October 2008 (UTC)

RE: FYI
Thanks for the information. -- Michaeldsuarez  ( Talk ) ( Deeds ) 03:13, 20 October 2008 (UTC)

Update
Well, Ataru, the other day on the iRC (probably a couple weeks back) you read the first half of Star Wars: Knighthood: Chapter 3, and I just wanted to let you know that I just updated it and it's complete. Give it a read if you want to. :) --Victortalk 06:05, 21 October 2008 (UTC)


 * I actually just merged the first three chapters into one page (which will also later have Chapters 4 and 5) so the new link is actually Star Wars: Knighthood: Chapters 1-5 (Note: I have yet to fix my screw up with the redirects at this time. Hopefully by the time you get this message, this should be fixed). --Victortalk 06:21, 21 October 2008 (UTC)

Quote
What makes you think you can throw quotes on my page? &mdash;  JM ' 76 ' Ask Archives 00:25, 22 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Well, you, see, it was like this-WHAT IN THE WORLD COULD THAT POSSIBLY BE?! LOOK OVER THAT WAY!?! In all seriousness, I was trying to bring some lulz to your page.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:34, 22 October 2008 (UTC)

Re:Congratulations
Hey Ataru, thanks for the congratulations, I'm very pleased and thankful for your assistance in the matter. I shall see about checking out Heritage very soon, as the excerpt sounds quite interesting. Vagrant Lustoid (Talk) 04:11, 24 October 2008 (UTC)

Favour
If you've got a moment, Ataru, I'd like you to have a look at the second chapter of my fanfic. I just want to know if I'm on a good track, although you can do a proper review if you want too. Thanks. Unit 8311 Talk!  16:28, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Writing is decent&mdash;some small tweaks needed for grammar, but otherwise fine. I'm no big fan of the plot, to be sure. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:38, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Okay, thanks. Is it the earth setting that does it for you, just out of curiosity? Unit 8311 [[Image:1110 Big small.jpg|20px]] Talk!  16:50, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Yes, it most certainly is. It entirely breaks the G-canon concept and basic premise of Star Wars: A *long* time ago, in a galaxy *far, far* away. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:52, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Hence the wormhole plot device. But nonetheless thanks for answering. Unit 8311 [[Image:1110 Big small.jpg|20px]] Talk!  16:53, 25 October 2008 (UTC)

FW nom page
Yep I saw the Heritage nom. I've started reading it as well, but still a ways to go before I finish. Thanks for the heads up though. -- Kathkira talk  06:10, 29 October 2008 (UTC)

FE 4 cover
I have to ask if you got my email. I have to ask because gmail has been ornery lately and sometimes my messages don't send or I don't get them. Thank you! - Solus (Bird of Prey)  23:10, 11 November 2008 (UTC)


 * Ornery? Well mama says alligators are ornery because dey got all dem teeth, but no tooth brush....... Sorry, had to do it. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea  <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 23:13, 11 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Received. I have no idea what Rhea's comment was about, though. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:16, 11 November 2008 (UTC)

You've never seen The Waterboy? - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 01:22, 12 November 2008 (UTC)

Main page
Sorry I took so long with this; here's the Main Page redesign v2. If it's alright, I'll start doing the coding. Once again, really sorry I took so long with this. Drewton  ( Drewton's Holocron ) 17:07, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * It looks pretty good to me, assuming that the Wikia banner and partnership boxes are below the community and DYK boxes. I would compress the Wikia banner so that it fits on the same "line" with the Wikia banner. I'm not sure if you've done that&mdash;the image is sort of cut off. Also, I would check to make sure the QotW box is aligned with the bottom of the banner ad. Other than that, I'm happy with it. Now, if the banner ads are hidden, it seems that everything gets moved up, which might destroy the alignment. I don't know if you've considered that, but for people who use adblock or equivalent, a lot of things will get moved around. Thanks again for your work. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:10, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Glad you like it. I don't think the allignment is changed for those blocking the ads. I was doing it before by editing my MediaWiki settings, and the ads were only disappearing; nothing else was changed. The QOTW box can also be moved down and therefore not aligned with the ads if some more of the current introduction info is used. Drewton  [[Image:Era-old.png|20px]] ( Drewton's Holocron ) 19:15, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure on the alignment thing. However, I seem to recall that Wookieepedia used a trick to force a banner ad on the Main Page, which might be preferable. On the QOTW stuff, I just want to make sure there's not a lot of empty white space on the Main Page. Thanks. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:20, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * EDIT: I logged out and logged back in, since registered users don't see the ads, and the boxes under the ads will move up. Also, I'm not sure on tricks to force banner ads on the Main Page; the logged out view did have the box ad as well. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:22, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Chapter
I just wanted to let you know that the full Chapter Nineteen of The Chosen One has been released for your viewing pleasure. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 04:24, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

TLM
I e-mailed the next chapter of TLM to you. :) -- <font color="#000001">(talk) <font color="#000001">(contributions) 17:11, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm also ready to e-mail the next chapter to you, when you're free. :) --[[Image:Darth tom sig.png|100px]] <font color="#000001">(talk) <font color="#000001">(contributions) 07:55, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I've read and replied to the first chapter. Sorry it took me so long to get to it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:13, 2 December 2008 (UTC)

The Battle of Sajak Var
Hey, when you have a moment, could you have a glance at Sajak Var, and give me your thoughts? Doesn't have to be major. Thanks. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 04:53, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Since I had a few minutes, I took a look at your article. To be as blunt as I usually am, the writing's below what I would consider "par" for SWF. The second paragraph of childhood is pretty poor. The wording and diction in general also could use some help&mdash;and it just doesn't flow that well. Then there's the plot holes: how does he learn how to fly a starship? How does he get to Nar Shaddaa without a navicomputer or hyperdrive? You say that his father went to Nar Shaddaa to meet with his master-but he was a bounty hunter, not a slave or Jedi. The whole bar incident bit needs a total rewrite. The next plot hole is the idea of this unarmed Human chasing down a well-armed man. The rational response would be to flee, no matter how angry he was. Furthermore, since the secret apprentice is that overpowered, he should be able to tell that Var is not hiding something&mdash;he should sense primal fear. Next plot hole: The Emperor certainly wouldn't go to Nar Shaddaa&mdash;he tried to have the place destroyed&mdash;and certainly not to kill some bounty hunter. If he's not a bounty hunter, well, that's pushing the suspension of disbelief. You can cry "Alternate Universe" as an excuse, but it's totally out of character for Palpatine&mdash;stretching my suspension of disbelief. Another big issue with this article is its tendency to lapse into play-by-play. Readers don't need to know every single action that the character made&mdash;that's more the realm of narratives, and even then, not always. Now, all those are general tips. If you're thinking GA, you'll need a much better intro, fix the dozen-odd capitalization errors, all the missing words, and a bunch of stilted sentences. You'll also need to clear all the POV ("Luckily" and "cruel" stand out as particularly notable examples). Also, I think GAs require a Personality and Traits section. To be honest, I just don't see this as GA material as it stands, if that's what you're aiming for. It's not really a Mary Sue insofar as I can tell, but it's lacking in article quality. Hope that helps you with your improvements; I wasn't quite sure what you were wanting me to comment on. Atarumaster88  ( Talk page ) 05:25, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

I certainly wasn't going to nominate it for GA as it is now; but anyway, thanks for your quick response. To be honest, I think I just rushed into creating this character too fast. My heart isn't in it as much as I'd like it to be; I have some other ideas, so maybe I'll start working on those instead. Anyway, thanks for the elaborate review. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 05:29, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * You're welcome. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 05:31, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Do you think I should delete the article and paste it into word, so I can start with (another) clean slate, or keep it and work on it another time? Just curious what you think. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 05:33, 29 November 2008 (UTC)


 * And one more thing: Why wouldn't the Emperor go to Nar Shaddaa? The reason I had him travel there is because he always emphasized the need for absolute control, and the need to strike fear in the people to keep them at bay. Why wouldn't he make a quick execution trip? -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 05:34, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * That is entirely up to you. Write what you want because you want to. I try very hard not to tell people how to write their stories&mdash;if anything, I see the reviewer as someone who can put things into perspective-point out errors, holes, etc, and take an unbiased look at it, but not a good guide of where you should take your story. Sorry if that's not helpful.

To comment on the Emperor: If you've read The Hutt Gambit by A. C. Crispin, the planet was not under direct Imperial control, if you want the canonical take on it. Logically speaking, the Emperor would not trouble with such an insignificant world, when his time was needed elsewhere. There's just no good reason for him to be there. Nor would he bother with executing a lowly bounty hunter&mdash;such things are beneath the Emperor's time. Now, if it was a Jedi Master in hiding, he might send Vader to do that, but ruling a galaxy is far too demanding to just rush off for executions. Even then, executions have to be pretty public to make a good impression, and waltzing into an incredibly lawless planet is not a good idea if you're planning public executions. Lastly, the idea of striking fear into people was Tarkin's doctrine, not necessarily Palpatine's. Atarumaster88   ( Talk page ) 05:41, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Regarding the first part: Actually, that does help, thanks. And, though I'm not completely convinced, I know you've probably read/know a lot more about Palpatine that I have/do, so I'll take your word for it. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 05:48, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

FE rewrites
I've finished the rewrites to Yanibar Tales and EGTFE. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 03:13, 30 November 2008 (UTC)


 * I meant to change that disclaimer on EGTFE, since I copied it over from another FE article with the intent to change that last bit, but I forgot to do so. Sorry about that. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 03:29, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Not a problem. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:30, 1 December 2008 (UTC)

Category
Just a heads up, Vic did have an edit summary in the "Works by" category (quote: "I'm sorry my friend. Per Forum:Restrict user-based categories"), although when the category was deleted the edit summary also went with it. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 16:48, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Ah, I see. Yes, that would make sense. Thanks. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:15, 1 December 2008 (UTC)

Force Exile nom
Just finished reading fugative and I thought it was great. The only problem is you use present tense sometimes and it's a little confusing. Other than that, great! <font color="#008080">Katana <font color="#008080">Geldar  08:12, 2 December 2008 (UTC)

RE: 4WA
Okay, thank you. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  12:22, 2 December 2008 (UTC)

Main Page
I just put this together. It's a simple solution until we can figure more out, if need be. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 19:28, 28 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Seems to work as a temporary solution. As a certain character you happen to like would say "Make it so." Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:21, 29 December 2008 (UTC)

Sounds good. I'll put it up on January 1st to get us on a proper one month schedule. - <font color="#1A2BBB">Brandon Rhea <font color="#1A2BBB">(talk) <font color="#1A2BBB">(contribs) 21:50, 29 December 2008 (UTC)

The main page redesign is now complete. Any objections? Drewton  ( Drewton's Holocron ) 22:09, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Looking much better, but is there supposed to be a giant white space box near the bottom? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:16, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * At the left side? There's nothing that can really be done about that, except for putting the partners and Star Wars wikis template there. Or, we could flip the Community and the Did you know sections. Drewton  [[Image:Era-old.png|20px]] ( Drewton's Holocron ) 22:18, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Depending on how much work it would be, you could also stack the FA and FW boxes on top of each other, instead of side-to-side. That would even things out some more, leaving the other three boxes-community, DYK, and Navigation to even out better. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:23, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Did a test, and it looks a bit better, I think. The columns on the right would be reordered if we did this, of course. Drewton  [[Image:Era-old.png|20px]] ( Drewton's Holocron ) 22:39, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * It does look better. A few tweaks you might want to implement: The FW and FA boxes have different header styles from the other three, and the QotW and about boxes don't align well. I'd also try and fit the partners box into that white space on the right side. That'll conserve space and look even better, IMO. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:42, 29 December 2008 (UTC)

Golden Age of the Republic, et al.
Thanks, Ataru. :) I must say, though, I have really enjoyed what I've read on the Force Exile series. I also appreciate you keeping with canon. For me, at least, it makes the story much more believable. If you have any insight for me, feel free to let me know. I'm doing a progressive release of the first story draft just to get my feet wet with fiction writing. (I'm so used to writing academic articles.) Anyway, thanks again and I look forward to now reading Smuggler. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 05:04, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
 * I'm glad you've enjoyed the Force Exile series thus far&mdash;any feedback or comments are greatly appreciated. I don't have a lot of insight when it comes to actually writing&mdash;I got my start much the same you did in that I wanted to try out a different style of writing rather than encyclopediac prose. I will say this: proofread everything and don't ever toss anything. Just file it away. I've often found old, stale ideas that I rejected in earlier drafts, and been able to refine and spruce it into something usable. Take care, and good luck with your ventures. ;) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:39, 4 January 2009 (UTC)