CS:Sela Kerroro

This is the archived discussion of the rejected nomination of Sela Kerroro for featured article.

Approve

 * 1) &mdash;  JM ' 76 ' Ask Archives [[Image:Sabersmilyjm76.jpg|18px]] 07:28, 26 October 2008 (UTC)

Objections

 * 1) From the screen of the Solusinator:
 * 2) Image:EsCape.jpg is not sourced properly.
 * 3) Personality is Mary Sue-ish. - Solus  (Bird of Prey)  16:35, 9 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) *Sorted out the first one, but no idea what you mean by the second. Mind elaborating? [[Image:Darthtomsig.png|163px]] iChat What I've done 09:19, 15 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) JM76's comments
 * 6) * Bare BtS. Looks good besides that. &mdash;  JM ' 76 ' Ask Archives [[Image:Sabersmilyjm76.jpg|18px]] 19:06, 12 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) **Sorted that. Is it to your satisfaction? --[[Image:Darth tom sig.png|100px]] (talk) (contributions) 12:16, 25 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) Review…
 * 9) *Infobox: Remove the "birth/death" fields - it is completely redundant and useless to tell us "unknown". Also, why isn't her full name in the infobox?
 * 10) *Introduction: "Sela was born into a small but powerful southern clan"; POV in powerful, just remove it. "she was thrown out of this village"; Say 'that' as opposed to 'this', and always remember to stay in 3rd person as opposed to 1st or 2nd. The next sentence, just like the preceding one, starts with "Eventually"; that gets redundant, so think of another way to word it. "Eventually, Trom framed her"; A little context on what she was framed for would be helpful. Remember, encyclopedic articles aren't supposed to be mysterious and are supposed to be about facts. "to find another House of Light"; Pops out of nowhere because there is no context on why it's another House of Light. Give context or simply remove "another". "Sela was captured by Trom once more, but was able to escape. After escaping, She and Hath married." Just like that huh? Give some context (at least) on where she escaped from or something, otherwise, saying she was captured and then (immediately) escaped doesn't help the intro. "Finally, they realized that they couldn’t complete their quest and Sela, who by now had become pregnant, was instructed to go to Dantooine to give birth to their son by Hath, who revealed to her that he was really The Light." First off, run on sentence. Secondly, who are "they"? No context on who they are. So like I said, it's a run on sentence, so please break it up for clearer reading. "Danreb eventually killed her."; Please say "killed Sela Kerroro".
 * 11) *Judging from this so far, this won't be a pleasant review. I remember reviewing this a long time ago and this still has a bunch of errors, so I will fully review later. --Victortalk 23:12, 27 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments
Another one. -- iChat What I've done 08:27, 9 July 2008 (UTC)

Will read this soon. Long article; looks like you did a good job with it. Drewton  ( Drewton's Holocron ) 01:14, 7 October 2008 (UTC)


 * I'm sure this wasn't your intention, but let's be sure not to say that just because an article is long it is therefore an article of quality. There are plenty of long articles on this wiki that are just absurd. - Brandon Rhea (talk) (contribs) 02:28, 7 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I'd looked over it and so hadn't based my opinion simply on length. Drewton  [[Image:Era-old.png|20px]] ( Drewton's Holocron ) 02:37, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

Vote to reject nomination


 * 1) I don't believe the author even looks at the objections or really cares or has time for this. The article is not close to featured standards and I do not feel like pointing out why, just glance at it yourself, or look at my brief objections above. Again, I vote to reject this nomination. --Victortalk 17:58, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Brandon Rhea (talk) (contribs) 18:02, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) I'm sick of this thing just sitting on the nomination page indefinitely. -MPK (MPK's Talk Page)|undefined 20:41, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) &mdash;  JM ' 76 ' Ask Archives [[Image:Sabersmilyjm76.jpg|18px]] 18:50, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Until the author begins serious attempts to rectify complaints. Unit 8311 [[Image:1110 Big small.jpg|20px]] Talk!  18:55, 27 November 2008 (UTC)