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Nebulax BtS
The character of Jack Nebulax was the first character to be included in a Force Exile work who was not either a canonical character or developed by Force Exile author Atarumaster88. Instead, Nebulax is the titular character for the fanon of a Star Wars Fanon user with the same moniker. Nebulax's inclusion was entirely due to the role that the character played in the first draft of the Force Exile saga. When he had written the first draft and posted it on Wookieepedia, Atarumaster88 had interacted with several different users, to the point of including fanonical characters of theirs. While he purged most of the story concepts when he began plotting out the Force Exile novels, Atarumaster88 did leave the character of Nebulax, an Imperial officer, in the characters list for the second or third novel. Even in the first draft, an encounter between Nebulax and the Hawk-bat had been written in, and Atarumaster88 wanted to preserve that.

After numerous changes to the evolving storyline of Force Exile, Nebulax's role was moved to Force Exile III: Liberator. As Atarumaster88 began pre-writing work for the novel, he contacted the creator of the Jack Nebulax character and obtained permission to use his character. Throughout the development and writing of Liberator, Atarumaster88 corresponded with Nebulax's creator, allowing him to preview and comment on each segment as it was written. Nebulax went on to serve as one of the three antagonists of Force Exile III, who were specifically intended to represent the three opponents of a Christian. Nebulax's role was analogous to Lucifer, the cunning trickster, and the one with the least in common to the protagonists. During the book, Nebulax exhibited a particular knack for timing with a torpedo-slingshot maneuver. This was a veiled reference to the Force-sensitivity given to the character by his creator. However, Atarumaster88 chose not to delve into that part of Nebulax's backstory, as he felt it would detract from the overall story.

Several months after Liberator was finished, Atarumaster88 again contacted the creator of Nebulax to provide the most up-to-date backstory for the character's entry in The Essential Guide to Force Exile. The creator sent a sizable backstory, which Atarumaster88 then edited and melded with information from Liberator to comprise the character's Essential Guide entry.

Helsi BTS
Helsi D'brisse was created as one of the principal antagonists of Force Exile II: Smuggler by Atarumaster88. She was conceived as a fairly flat character&mdash;the author was uncertain of how well he could handle a dynamic female villain, and so he kept her character simplistic on purpose. Her first name was inspired by "Hel," or "Hela," the queen of the underworld in Norse mythology, and also by Helsinki, the capital of Finland, a Scandinavian country. Her surname was structured to conform to similar naming patterns given to Mistryl names in canonical works, particularly Specter of the Past and Vision of the Future, in which all Mistryl surnames began with the D' prefix. Atarumaster88 modeled her behavior and character off of a young Karoly D'ulin, making her somewhat rash as well as irascible, albeit considerably talented. The image used to represent Helsi is a canonical image of a generic Mistryl Shadow Guard from Hero's Guide, which Atarumaster88 used as his original visual reference for the character. However, although her picture shows her carrying one, Helsi never employed a whip during Smuggler.

Trip BtS
The character of CC-3433 "Trip" was created for Force Exile I: Fugitive to act as a dramatic foil for Alpha-28 "Spectre." While both men are clones of Jango Fett serving in the Grand Army of the Republic, Trip was deliberately formulated to be more bound to the rules and regulations than Spectre, who as an ARC trooper is used to considerably more independence. Another difference between them is their attitude towards Jedi&mdash;while Trip's view is impersonal and unrelenting, Spectre, due to his time spent with Jedi Padawan Selusda Kraen, was a bit more trusting of them, resulting in his insistence on confirming Order 66. Trip places adherence to military regulation over principles, a move that gets him far in the Imperial military, whereas Spectre decides that some things are more important than the army.

Trip's operating number is a reference to 343 Guilty Spark, an artificial intelligence from the Halo series of games who was also known for strict adherence to protocol. His nickname, "Trip", is derived from his numerical designation. Much as the canonical Alpha-98 bore a nickname of "Nate," a portmanteau of "Nine" and "Eight," Trip's nickname comes from the three threes in his operating number. The image used for trip is that of a generic clone commander from the cover of the canonical novel Shatterpoint.

Trip is the only Republic/Imperial character to appear in all of the first three Force Exile novels, though his appearance in Force Exile II: Smuggler only serves to conclude a plot line started between him and Spectre in Force Exile I. The character of CC-3433 was originally only created for Force Exile I: Fugitive and Force Exile II: Smuggler and was only a minor character. However, after re-drafting part of Force Exile III: Liberator, the author felt that having Spectre face off against his old commander would serve the story well, and he worked "Trip" back into the story in a more significant role than his previous two appearances. Trip serves as a foil for Spectre in all three books. He follows the rules explicitly, as opposed to Spectre's more creative nature. When going through the fourth draft of Force Exile III: Liberator, Atarumaster88 became concerned about how the interaction between Kinman Doriana and the Force exiles would occur. Examining the second draft, he found a confrontation between Spectre and Trip, and although he had removed it from the third draft, Atarumaster88 found that the plot line served not only to bridge the gap between Doriana's Imperials and the Force exiles, but also provided a way for Spectre to demonstrate the character development he had experienced throughout the book. His death at the hands of Spectre marked the ultimate severing of ties between Spectre and his former life in the Republic/Imperial military.

Annita BtS
The character of Annita Daowot was specifically developed for Force Exile II: Smuggler to serve as a foil for Cassi Trealus and fill a storyline need that required a member of the Commenorian law enforcement. She existed in some of the earliest drafts of the novel, though her role was not originally as large. Annita was intended to both be sympathetic to the protagonists, but also be a source of tension between Sarth and Cassi, giving her a duality of natures. However, the love triangle between her, Cassi Trealus, and Sarth Kraen wasn't planned until later in the development. She was also essential to moving the plot along, serving as the fulcrum for the travel of Selusda Kraen to Emberlene for the climactic final scene of the book.

Annita's original name was "Slani," but Force Exile author Atarumaster88 decided that too many characters already had names beginning with the letter s. Her personality and skills were directly modeled off a friend of the author who is also an expert in forensics. The expertise contributed by this individual was valuable to the author in terms of allowing him to write realistic descriptions of certain scenes, particularly those involving injuries or corpses.

In the first released draft of Smuggler, the conflict between Annita, Cassi, and Sarth was never resolved inside the novel, only alluded to. At one stage during the writing, the author considered placing a scene with an extended fight between Cassi and Annita. This was dropped for being anticlimatic; as it disrupted the pacing of the story. After a review by Jedi Master 76 two months after the release of the novel, Atarumaster88 decided to insert a scene which would show the resolution of the tension between them. However, he was unsure about how realistic his dialogue would be in a scene with Cassi and Annita, feeling that writing deep, emotional female-to-female dialogue would be difficult. As such, he elicited the help of a female user on the Star Wars Fanon Wiki, Solus, to read over and suggest corrections to the scene before inserting it.

She was not originally intended to have appearances outside of Smuggler. However, as he finishing Smuggler, Atarumaster88 thought that it might be interesting to pair her with Jorgesoll Knrr to provide her with an enduring romantic interest. He also decided to give the two an appearance in the sequel to Smuggler, Force Exile III: Liberator, as he didn't want to leave Jorge and Annita's relationship unresolved in the third book. When he first started writing Liberator, he did not originally plan to feature them in a large role, but after re-drafting the novel's layout, he decided to set the final showdown of the book at their wedding. His reason for doing so was that it not only provided the impetus for the Force exiles to sever their ties to Commenor, but also he liked the incongruity of setting a sizable skirmish at a wedding. The author wanted to practice writing a wedding as a precursor for the planned wedding of Selu and Milya, which was part of his reasoning for writing the scene.

Atarumaster88 continued to include Annita, as well as her husband, Jorge, in subsequent Force Exile works, including the Yanibar Tales anthology, as he enjoyed writing their characters. They had cameo appearances in Hand in Hand, the second story to be released in the collection of short stories. Once the author decided to place Jorge and Annita on Bespin at the end of Liberator, it also made sense for them to be included in Hand in Hand&mdash;that too, did not occur in the initial planning stages of the short story. Annita was portrayed by actress Rose Byrne, who played Dormé in Star Wars Episode II: Attack of the Clones.

<!-- Kinman Doriana was a high-ranking Imperial advisor from Naboo. He was known to be in Palpatine's inner circle during the latter stages of the Republic and the beginning of the Empire and was trusted to the point that he was personally dispatched to assist the Trade Federation in eliminating the Outbound Flight project. With his years of loyal and efficient service, Doriana proved to be a valuable agent for the Emperor.

One of his rare failures came when he enlisted the aid of the Car'das Syndicate to set up a subtle surveillance net to track a fugitive Kiffar Jedi named Quinlan Vos on New Holstice a year after the rise of the Empire.

His last major assignment was when a high-ranking officer was called in to deal with a potentially sensitive situation on the former Separatist holdout of Cato Neimoidia, where isolated pockets of resistance had continued to flare up against the Empire even three years after the world's initial subjugation. At the time, Doriana had been in charge of transporting an experimental prototype&mdash;the concept of which led to the World Devastators&mdash;along with a collection of Jedi relics to the Emperor's private storehouse on Wayland, up until he was diverted to Cato Neiomoidia. On Cato Neimoidia, Doriana was greeted by a clone trooper commander, CC-3433, or Trip, who had made the initial report. Trip led the advisor to a recently seized luxury estate, where the Imperial troops had recovered over three thousand highly experienced and skilled Xi Charrian technicians and engineers, along with a complete set of Separatist data cores. Doriana immediately took charge of them, and ordered that both the Xi Charrians and data cores be loaded onto his ship, the Griffin. His intentions were to make a detour past Despayre, in the Outer Rim, and add the Xi Charrians to the work force laboring on the Death Star, which would have greatly assisted the project and brought Doriana considerable prestige. He also ordered Trip and his detail to accompany him, as Doriana intended to leave the trooper and his men at the Death Star with a strong recommendation for promotion as a reward for his service to the Empire.

However, things did not go as planned. While the Griffin was large enough to accommodate the additional personnel and cargo, the ship was undercrewed, even with Trip's troops added to its numbers. This was due to the fact that Wayland's location was incredibly secret-the Griffin ' s crew were all to be left on the planet, in fact. As such, the Griffin was hard-pressed to defend itself from attack when a tiny group of pirates attacked the ship. Though the Imperials repelled the pirates with the aid of ground-based fighter squadrons, the Griffin sustained serious damage to its hyperdrive, delaying its journey. Due to the political sensitivity, as well as secrecy of the cargo, Doriana was unable to call in another ship to provide transport. The knowledge Trip gave him, which revealed that the pirates were the remnants of an organization called the Blood Neks, led by a Devaronian named Sulan'bask, did little to comfort him.

Even when they finally departed after lengthy and time-consuming, their speed was reduced, increasingly his travel time to distant Wayland, though he was relieved to see that the Griffin had been given a Carrack-class cruiser as escort. Doriana reported his vexation and delays to Darth Vader, and the Dark Lord of the Sith responded by killing the captain of the Griffin for his incompetence. However, little did Doriana know that the Griffin was being stalked by Sulan'bask, who had replenished his forces with heavier warships. During a navigational layover in the remote Hoth system, Sulan'bask sprung his trap, quickly destroying the escorting cruiser and launching boarding craft to seize Griffin. Thankfully for Doriana, Imperial reinforcements were called for, and the Victory-class Star Destroyer Corrupter responded. However, although Trip was able to defeat the boarders, his few remaining troopers were unable to resist the sudden arrival of a group of Force exiles, who had wandered into the battle by accident. The Force exiles, with one of their ships damaged, decided to try appropriating the Griffin. They were able to defeat the Imperial crewer, and their leader, a Jedi Knight named Selusda Kraen, captured Doriana. Doriana, a gifted orator, attempted to persuade Selu to join the Emperor's service and once again serve the galaxy, and those his words had some effect, Selu ultimately rejected the offer.

Instead, along with the other captured crewmembers, Doriana was loaded into escape pods and fired off towards the damaged Corrupter before the Force exiles absconded with the Griffin, escaping into hyperspace. He was recovered by the Corrupter and gave the Imperials there, including an Inquisitor named Ajaur as much information as he could. Together, they were able to determine the identity of the Jedi, as well as his homeworld, thanks to a transmission from Commenor from an Imperial Intelligence officer named Amavel Norres who suspected that certain Commenorian citizens had ties to the same group of Force exiles. When Ajaur resolved to go to Commenor in pursuit, Doriana agreed to accompany the testy Inquisitor in an attempt to redeem himself for losing the Xi Charrians, the Jedi relics, and the Separatist data cores.

Arriving on Commenor, Doriana, Ajaur, and Norres set an elaborate trap for the Force exiles, trying to seize one of the key suspects at her wedding. Little did they know that the Force exiles were there, and though they had prepared for that eventuality, they did not anticipate the considerable local support shown to the Force exiles. Both Norres and Ajaur fell, and while Doriana tried to rally the Imperials present and signal for reinforcements, he was unable to stop a light freighter, the Hawk-bat from arriving to exfiltrate the last few Force exiles. Unfortunately for Doriana, he was in an exposed position when it arrived, and caught most of a blast from its nose laser-cannons. The wound was fatal and he died having failed his master completely, as the Force exiles escaped shortly thereafter.

Behind the scenes
Kinman Doriana was selected as one of the key antagonists of Force Exile III: Liberator early in the writing process, though he also had a minor, indirect appearance in Force Exile II: Smuggler. He was chosen because he was a canonical character with an unspecified death during the Imperial period, whom the author was both familiar with and could serve as an intelligent, civilized non-military antagonist. As one of the three antagonists of Liberator, Doriana was symbolic of one of the three opponents of a Christian. Ajaur represents the desires of the flesh, Nebulax is Lucifer, the cunning trickster, and Doriana is the world, the path of reason and material rewards. The scene where he attempted to win over Selu Kraen with promises of service and rewards was specifically written to exemplify that comparison.

Doriana's mention of Vader's ruthlessness in comparison to the Emperor is a reference to a similar comparison made by Vader during Return of the Jedi. The incident Doriana recalls to regarding the execution of the design team and the failure of their creation to destroy its target is a reference to the events mentioned in Children of the Jedi. These events were meant to be discussed in more detail in Force Exile III, but were cut for canonical timeline reasons. The fate of the design team was inspired from Palpatine’s similar actions described by Bevel Lemelisk in the novel Darksaber. Doriana also mentions a single time that he held military command and that it had an unpleasant ending; this is a reference to the events of Outbound Flight, which the author used heavily as source material for writing his character.

Appearances

 * Force Exile II: Smuggler
 * Force Exile III: Liberator

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Jorge BtS
Jorgesoll Knrr was originally designed to serve as one of the first Hawk-bat crewmembers encountered by Selusda Kraen. His characterization as a Corellian smuggler and as the first mate of Hawk-bat alongside the Bothan captain R'hask Sei'lar was a deliberate albeit somewhat altered reversal of the roles of Han Solo and Chewbacca. Earlier drafts of Force Exile did not include Jorgesoll Knrr. The character was not conceived until the third draft of the first novel, Force Exile I: Fugitive, when author Atarumaster88 realized that the Hawk-bat needed more crewmembers, and created supporting characters such as Jorge and Cassi to fill the crew positions.

Jorge's name is meant to be pronounced similarly to the English name "George", not the Latin pronunciation with a silent j. His first name was inspired by the creator of Star Wars, George Lucas. Jorge's surname, Knrr, is derived from the surname of director Irvin Kershner, who directed The Empire Strikes Back. His initial depiction was supposed to have been one of canonical character Rik Duel, also a Corellian smuggler, but the fact that Duel had only appeared in comics limited the usefulness of images of Duel. Instead, an image of actor Henry Ian Cusick was used to portray the Corellian after an extensive search by Atarumaster88.

The roles of Jorge and R'hask Sei'lar in Fugitive were both intentionally limited, as they were relegated to only appearing in the final third of the book. Jorge was characterized as amiable and a ladies' man, but both competent and intensely loyal to Captain Sei'lar. His role would be much more significant in Force Exile II: Smuggler, the sequel to Fugitive, as Atarumaster88 sought to expand a number of character roles, including Jorge's.

In Smuggler, Jorge and R'hask Sei'lar would have a significant amount of exposition devoted to their clandestine efforts to supply arms to the Naboo resistance. This secret mission served as the foundation on which the death of R'hask Sei'lar was set. The death of Sei'lar at the hands of the Empire served as a major character shift for Jorge, and revealed a man reeling from pain and shock. Jorge's despair, guilt, and inability to cope served as an avenue for Selusda Kraen to step in and assume command of the Hawk-bat temporarily. Jorge's guilt and a desire to recompense for his earlier failures also motivated him to accompany the subsequent mission to rescue Selusda Kraen. Finally, the loss of Sei'lar served to convince Jorge that his spacing days were over, which provided a means for Selu to take permanent ownership of the Hawk-bat, which was essential for the plot of Force Exile III: Liberator. The end of Smuggler also the fledgling sparks of a relationship between Jorge and Commenorian law enforcement agent Annita Daowot.

Jorge was not originally intended to feature in Liberator, but Atarumaster88 enjoyed writing both his character and that of Annita, so he included both of them. In fact, their role in the story served to highlight the whirlwind romance between them and set the stage for the final climatic battle on Commenor at their wedding. The end of Liberator saw Jorge and Annita take up residence on Bespin following the skirmish on Commenor, where they served as a link between Yanibar and the greater galaxy. Jorge also later reappeared in the second Yanibar Tale, Hand in Hand, but only in a minor role as part of the wedding and disrupted honeymoon of Selusda Kraen and Milya Tayrce. -->