User blog:Nightmare975/First chapter of Imperial Treachery is released!

Finally, after many rewrites, I am proud to release a sample of the first chapter of Imperial Treachery! Why a sample you ask? Because This is as far as I've gotten. :P

Now, this is a still a work in progress, but I would like some (read: A LOT) of criticism, please inform me of any problems that you spot. I want this thing to be spotless.

Chapter 1 (Pages 1-2)

I probably will write some more after this, but since I have yet to post anything, I figured to release a sample of my work.