Talk:Aurelius Tempest

As far as standards go, this is on the right track. Things that are lacking are that the introduction, the personality and traits, and the talents need to be of substantial length. Perhaps more images would serve the article better, although technically, the main picture is enough. You should also detail his later life, detailing each of the events in question, all of his murders, etc.

Another thing you need to make sure you do is write the entire article in past tense, and that you keep it in an "encyclopedic" form. Meaning no thoughts unless you quote them (such as "Tempest believed that if his own family couldn't live, neither should the Yoogish" instead of putting it in a "novel" form. Once you fix that, the article will be much better. As far as the story goes, I like it. I like how he was a heroic Imperial General, and then fell from grace, from becoming suicidal to becoming insane and monstrous. Pretty good. -- Victor, Sr. HoloNet 209 06:34, 3 December 2007 (UTC)