DL:Star Wars: Legion Commando

Disapprove/complaints

 * 1) This isn't a complaint, per say, but I just don't know about this article. I'll check back later, after I can give full reasons behind whether I support this or not. [[Image:NKsig.png|70px]] Jesus Freak NK says NK's 'mazin' articles [[Image:sabersmilygreend.jpg]] 19:58, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I don't know either. Too much of this is just a list. - President Brandon Rhea  [[Image:Presidentialseal.gif|27px]]  (Pressroom)  (Accomplishments)  20:57, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) *I'll be beefing up the sections to make them less listy soon. Unit 8311 20:55, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Erm, just no. The introduction is awful, and tells very little about the story of the game, and is more like a comparison to the numerous canon games. Way too many lists, and what sections are written in paragraphs are far too short. In fact, the only section I see as being up to FA standards is "Gameplay", and that is in terms of length. Darth Abeonis Sith Council Sith Campaign 00:05, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Had a fiddle with the intro, is it any better now? And if not, what would you see as a good intro? Unit 8311 16:32, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * What about the rest of it? Darth Abeonis Sith Council Sith Campaign 20:44, 19 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) From the screen of the Solusinator:
 * 2) *Only 11 non-date links.
 * 3) *No section on game development (FWR 5)
 * 4) *Purely preference, but images are not staggered right-left-right etc.
 * 5) *Almost all of the images are incorrectly sourced. - Solus (Bird of Prey)  20:36, 1 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) From the barebones and list-covered desk of Atarumaster88
 * 7) *Way too listy. This is a major concern, see above.
 * 8) *"The gameplay and feel is quite similar" POV unless supported by evidence. (intro)
 * 9) *Gameplay section is very weak. Limited or no description of interface, environment interaction, mission set up, campaign interaction, save points, locale, graphics rendering, or NPC involvement given. Nor are the stealth mechanics or visor options explained. This is a major concern.
 * 10) *"You will not get penalized if you do this. " Informal tone, reword.
 * 11) *For the record, the installment of Halo that you linked to does not feature re-charging health.
 * 12) *All uses of second person (you, your) must die.
 * 13) *All sorts of POV in the listy parts. I assume that when you re-write this, you will fix it. There's a difference between saying something is effective against armort and saying something is virtually unstoppable.
 * 14) *The characters section should absolutely not be a list. This a major concern.
 * 15) *Italicize class names. (Sentinel, e.g.)
 * 16) *Unless these levels are supposed to take 20 minutes to beat each, then the Levels section will need reworked. Rule 3.2 and 3.3. Lots of short paragraphs.
 * 17) *"Once he arrives at the vault, you are to cover Legion droids packing up the money there from various waves of attackers, starting with various low-level thugs to eventually Imperial militia to stormtroopers. The player must mix melee attacks with firearms, are there is almost no spare ammo available in the level. If you can find time, you can locate batteries scattered across the vault to activate auto-turrets to help you." Second person, wording issues in next-to-last sentence.
 * 18) *How does a Defiler hop onto multiple speeder bikes at once?
 * 19) *"beside the Defiler and swipes at him" Reword.
 * 20) *"There are powerful enemies around almost every corner and overwhelming amounts of them too." POV.
 * 21) *"the number of enemies the player must face doubles, but with Jandek helping you, this is not as difficult." Second person.
 * 22) *Multiplayer section is quite small and listy. This is a major concern.
 * 23) *Per above, a development section is needed. This is a major concern.
 * 24) *Skimpy BtS needs more, much more content. This is a major concern.
 * 25) *I'm so glad this won't be hitting stores any time soon, but at the same time, it's not hitting the FA list any time soon in its current iteration; it's far from complete and lacking in quality. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:32, 14 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) **I have addressed a portion of your demands, my master, but recognising the volume of them and the limitations of thou servant's time, I will regrettably have to sort the rest at a later time. I hope that thou will forgive me for this. Unit 8311 18:22, 14 July 2008 (UTC)