Talk:Gray Jedi Code/@comment-32152343-20170530104141/@comment-98.19.194.9-20170604212615

Your rewrite destroys the point of the original. Every line is the original is about balance. But you have lines like:

"There is no serenity, without peace to guide it."

It seems like you don't know what serenity is, because its definition is "the state of being calm, peaceful, and untroubled." So that line basically means you can't have peace without peace. The original code you based this on is about balance, but you don't have much balance at all in your revised code. "Thgere is no passion, without the power to fuel it." "There is no knowledge, without the serenity to see it." This isn't balanced.