Thread:PrimalTheGreat3021/@comment-104549-20170709203135/@comment-104549-20170718043357

Let's unpack this piece-by-piece.
 * Tense
 * You're correct in noting that the Article Guidelines require articles to be written in past tense, not present tense. I sympathize with your unfamiliarity, as most of my creations deal with chat RP, which is written in present tense, but of course the Article Guidelines control.  However, it's worth noting that that was not what my original message concerned.
 * While we're on the subject, though, some of your recent revisions (e.g. this one to Makshakel Fury) appear to unnecessarily change the past tense to the past participle. The different is beyond the scope of this conversation, but good resources can be found here and here.
 * An example of a required change is here: "He comes off as Cruel, but only because he hates those who enslaved him..." Both "comes" and "hates" are in present tense, and should be their past equivalents ("came" and "hated", respectively).
 * Article Commentary
 * It may indeed be unusual to put commentary in a "Behind the Scenes" section, and it's entirely up to you whether you put it there. However, the Article Guidelines do not allow you to put it anywhere else in an article.
 * Existing examples of commentary include:
 * Here: Effectively the entire first paragraph. Articles are to be written encyclopedically, treating the stories in them as if they were "fact".  As such, because there can only be one "true" version of events, articles should not have options.  There might be atypical exceptions (e.g. a character had visions of multiple potential futures), but none apply here.
 * NB: This also presents a first-person issue, as discussed below.
 * Here: The parenthetical at the end of the first paragraph.
 * Here: The final parenthetical about "characters on this wiki"
 * Here: The advice to "Seriously, like go play Star Wars:The Old Republic..." It's questionable whether advice to readers is appropriate in an article at all, but definitely not outside "Behind the Scenes".
 * First and Second Person
 * A solid general rule is that "I", "me", "we", "us", possessives of those, and any variation of "you" belong only in quotes, comments, blog posts, and your user page. Everything else should be third-person, including the "Behind the Scenes" section.  The Article Guidelines do allow author observations and comments in the "Behind the Scenes" section, but they do not allow the BtS to be first-person.
 * Examples of first- and second-person narrative:
 * Here: You correctly moved your commentary to a "Behind the Scenes" section, but it remains first person.
 * Here: "you'd"
 * Here: Various uses of first person.
 * Here: The "you" in "you get the point"
 * Here: One "your" and two "you"s.

I hope this clarifies everything. If you need additional clarification, reply here.