Talk:Ta Run

Short review, as requested. First, technical stuff. In the infobox, the first word of each section must always be capitalized, that's proper, although if he has no hair, leave the section blank instead. Then capitalized "White" for eye color and "Breathing mask" under cybernetics. In the era section, do not capitalized "Era", instead write it as "Legacy era". Onto the intro; Why do you put "born Ta Run" when "Admiral" is not a name? Just put "Admiral Ta Run was" or "Ta Run was a Kel Dor Admiral" rather than writing it as it is. "He was very cruel and sadistic, but an expert strategist" That is all very slanted in point-of-view (POV) and needs to be removed. "For his relentless attacks and brilliant strategy making abilities" More POV. "the Republic's most valued capitols" Capitols to capitals. Lastly, it could still use some more categories, like those of his gender and species. But basically this article lacks good prose and is pretty choppy. Nearly everything could be considered POV the way it's written, but I don't really need to get into detail. One last technical suggestion is to break that massive introduction into two or three shorter paragraphs. As far as the story goes, it's rather unimpressive, since there aren't really details on anything this dude did in his life. Of course this is just an introduction, but more story could work. --Victortalk 16:12, 16 November 2008 (UTC)