Talk:CL-9976/@comment-1009967-20180106033856

Like on Carg, I'd switch "apart", which means separate, with "in the (division)". You note Jango Fett was interested in the techniques he came up with, and that makes me wonder; his clones may have some mental similarities to him, so you could make a Quote template just under Biography from Fett about "When I was figuring out what kind of gun I'd use, I thought a lot about a heavy repeater. If I'd taken it, I might've turned out a lot like that daft little guy." Could also give him an origin for his name there, too.

Moments would seem a little convenient for timing, so you might say it was just days or weeks before Order 66 came down. His desire to kill his brothers is a bit extreme, though if Yoda or another Jedi had personally saved his life or those of the brothers turning on them, it might explain it a bit better. Speaking of, I know this site doesn't require us to stick exactly to canon, but it might be a neat story to have him assist Tarfful and Chewbacca get Yoda to his pod, perhaps by misdirecting the other troopers.

Overall, not as much content to speak on here, but still solid content. Might recommend adding where he gets the hair dye, like he has to trade ration bars with a civilian resupply ship captain or the like.