Talk:Gray Jedi Code/@comment-32152343-20170530104141/@comment-33605863-20180830010736

I'd have to agree with Spacetear's concerns about redundancy, but on the whole, I like the cyclical format. I took a crack using it:

From Knowledge, I draw Power

With Power, I create Peace

In Peace, I have achieved Victory

After my Victory, I gain Serenity

A shared Passion leads to Harmony

From Harmony, we draw Strength

Using my Strength, I acquire Knowledge

Life must lead to Death

Without Death, there can be no Life

The Force is in All Things,

All Things must be in Balance

From the Balance stems the Force

I don't know how pleased I am with it, I've got a few lines I'd consider rewriting.