Talk:Star Wars: Adventures of the Goddess

Star Trek
Wow, really? Star Trek as Star Wars. It's completely unoriginal to just use the entire cast from a film and claim them as the representation for your characters. *Sigh* As for the narrative itself, I actually took the time to read this and found it highly unpleasing. Lots of grammar errors and the prose is very 'cut and dry' so to speak. Chapter 1 seems very reminiscent of Star Trek's own opening scene. In chapter dude, Stark busts out 2 million credits from his wallet; really? He carries that much around? Chapter 3 has absolutely no characterization; plus, you say Han Solo the Five Hundred and Fourth (ridiculous) is leaving, yet he joins some strange crew for nothing. Again, more cut and dry stuff. I stopped there, because I couldn't read anymore. Overall, this needs to be polished and probably a major expansion. Sorry if you don't like my criticism, but, then, you shouldn't be posting your stories online. And this is not a novel. A short story at best, I didn't bother counting the words. Not even close. –Victor  (talk page ) 07:34, 9 June 2009 (UTC)