User blog comment:Brandon Rhea/THE CHOSEN ONE: Chapters 10 and 11 release/@comment-1169345-20090924030618

I read the first chapter. It is pretty good too.

Two minor things: I believe Mace is 'Korun' or 'Korunnai', I don't think people from Haruun Kal are called Korunian.

Also I believe you meant to say entering the atmosphere.