User blog comment:Brandon Rhea/THE CHOSEN ONE: Chapter 15 released/@comment-1169345-20091208224314

Well actually, the only other line that was clever wasn't even a dialogue line. I liked the quote from the Journal of the Whills at the beginning, apart from that I thought that most of the lines were from a standard conversation. Not that that is bad.

I also was surprised that Annikin chose not to take Sarus's offer to race Sebulba if only to free himself, not necessarily to become a Jedi. I thought the conflict in him was forced, and that his reasoning behind the decision not to do it was weak.

Ah I see. I kind of thought it was close to slavery, but not as close as it really was. Sort of like an indentured servant.

I did notice that there was barely any description about the snippet in this chapter. Still a good part to include in the chapter. Excellent job.