Talk:Star Wars: The Yuuzhan Vong/@comment-173.90.97.218-20190829143528/@comment-173.90.97.218-20190829155550

For favorite part: Probably the battle at the end, it was pretty cool.

For description: I agree it is better than other times you've done it. But it still needs some work, here's an example.

What you wrote.

'" Rise my legion, rise! " A foul smelling creature yelled with his arms waving up and down. The thing stood around seven feet and six inches, with ghastly red eyes. '

That's okay, it gives the reader an idea of what he looks like, but not a full description. The reader just knows he's tall, ugly and with red eyes, and there's  any a star wars fan who hasn't seen or read about the Yuuzhan Vong before so it may be confusing to them.

What I would've done:

" Rise my legion, rise! " The foul smelling creature shouted, his voice nearly echoing in the bulge. The being stood atop a large rock, above a sea of similar beings. They all were tall and with skull-like faces, the leader had red eyes. Rex felt a small amount of fear just at the sight of him.

I hope this is helpful, I don't mean it as an insult and hope you use my advice to get better! You got a lot of potential.