Thread:Sakaros/@comment-29301-20180903145046/@comment-104549-20191121225735

The "narrative style as a reflection of character" thing is tricky; I find it's especially challenging for me for new characters, when I don't already have a strong sense of their personalities.

I wouldn't say Mira's presence is jarring in the way I think you meant it; she's convincingly written. Correct me if I misread, but it seemed to me that, unlike Atton, Visas, and Mical, Mira didn't get any Force training from Meetra and Silbus (or perhaps even identified as being Force-sensitive), and I thought that was an interesting choice. I believe you mentioned that she was one of the few people Meetra didn't get her hooks in, so maybe that was a hint as to why? If anything jarred me about Mira, it was that her being the one to find Atton in a galaxy of quadrillions seemed a little convenient. Her employer is one of the many unanswered questions, so I'm open to being shown that it wasn't just a matter of convenience.

I wouldn't let the Darth Krayt reference bug you; I drop shout-outs now and then, as I'm sure you've noticed...unless you're saying my shout-outs are bad and I should feel bad.