User talk:75.41.3.62

Well, any article has the potential, and it is certainly long enough, however it needs a lot of improvement. Grammar is a major issue in the article. You never space between periods, which, in the infobox, caused it to stretch to a ridiculous level. I haven't read through it, but I can see the grammar errors, plus there are most likely spelling (judging from a brief overview). Another thing is while long sections are generally good, your paragraphs are far too long and could be divided into two/three smaller paragraphs.

And, although not a rule, the article should definitely have more pictures to define the events throughout your characters life. Lastly, you need to use quote for the quotes throughout the article, instead of manually trying to do so, and you need to remove unnecessary bolding throughout the article. That's pretty much it, but that's a lot, since it's everywhere in the article. Hope that helps. -- Squishy Vic HoloNet 209 21:59, 4 January 2008 (UTC)