Talk:Star Wars: The Alderaan Affair/Part I - A Boy Named Epin

A good start, but a short read. More details given in a narrative style about the physical appearance of each of the characters could be done. A tiny bit more detail on how Epin is held down could also work, and perhaps some injury-oriented details as well. Other than that, I am patiently waiting part two. :) --Victor talk 04:55, 1 October 2008 (UTC)


 * Thank you. On that note, I will add some more detail in the coming chapters, and will expand this as well.--  CurrentBigThing  ( Speak ) 04:59, 1 October 2008 (UTC)

Cool man. --Victor talk 05:00, 1 October 2008 (UTC)