CS:Dolucian

This is a review page for the featured article nomination Dolucian.

Objections

 * 1) Here's what I could find:
 * 2) *Context on the Galactic Civil War.
 * 3) *'develop a fierce warrior culture' 'fierce' is POV
 * 4) *'their exotic eye coloration' ditto for exotic
 * 5) *'- almost black in appearance -' not too necessary, and a bit prosey
 * 6) *'This presumption was not too far-fetched' POV
 * 7) *'The more Dolucians alienated themselves from religion, the more amoral their society became, and the stronger the Sons became.' amoral is POV, and this is a bit prosey.
 * 8) *'Although it was difficult,' add 'for them'.
 * ', the House of Elders on Doluc II was one such body.' replace the comma with a ';' at the start of this
 * 1) *'were instructed to help him carry out basic duties.' duties such as...?
 * 2) *Fix the link to CIS in the 'under foreign rule' section
 * 3) *Who is Ackbar? What is the rebel alliance?
 * 4) *'Although the Sith had a stronger military,' POV
 * 5) *What is the Galactic Alliance?
 * 6) *'Their exotic' POV
 * 7) *What is Israel?
 * 8) *All for now. Unit 8311 [[Image:1110 Big small.jpg|20px]] Talk!  15:53, 7 April 2009 (UTC)