User blog:Nightmare975/Failure at Cerea released! Plus some FaCs!

I can't believe I'm using a word pun now

I, for once, have released something on time! That's right boys and girls, I have released the remake of Failure at Cerea. You can read at the link provided on the article page or right here.


 * Read Failure of Cerea here

And now, some FaCs about FaC (groan). I created the original version on December 21, 2007. The story was to introduce the character of Aurea Hali into my friend's and I's campaign. I let the story sit here for years until October 8 this year when I found it while writing a scrapped short story for the short story contest (shame I couldn't get FaC to hit that 5,000 magic number). The original stood at 1,386 words, was littered with grammar (and most likely spelling) mistakes and a really poor storyline (in my opinion at least). I immediately stopped my work on the other story and set out to remake FaC with what I had learned since. It turns out that I had attempted to remake FaC before in March of this year, although it only contained two pages of the Mandalorian character, Theta, debating whether or not he should remove his mask to drink his ale. Luckily, I was able to condense that into three or four sentences.

I finished the first draft about a week or two ago. However, I felt a lot was missing, besides the fact that it barely touched the 2,500 mark. After a discussion with a friend of mine, I added in the slave girl character to converse with Theta and allow more of his thoughts to flow freely. My father also departed for New Orleans last week and provided me with a nice description of the area he was in, which in part became the citadel of Narlens. Around that time, the second draft totaled at 3,688 words. After adding in some more dialogue, changing some parts of the ending and more descriptions, I finished at 4,033 words.

Phew, that was a lot of ground I just covered. Anyways, I hope you all enjoy the story. I'll see you on the dark side...

-- Josh Bender Talk 09:17, November 15, 2009 (UTC)