Talk:Emperor Malus

Malphas the Dark Phrophesied
Okay let us begin properly. I find overly made characters to be too enticing. What do I mean? Well..."Alexander Fel also known as Darth Malphus, is a Force-sensitive and was a Jedi Master of the New Jedi Order of The Galactic Federation turned fearful Dark Emperor of the Dark Sith Empire. He was a Dark Lord of the Sith and the most powerful Sith to ever live. It is believed that Kalo had no parents according to the members of his Inner Circle they believe him to be (and rightfully so) The Legendary Dark One and that he was created by the Dark side of the Force itself, the Sith see him as their savior and the galaxy worship him as all knowing and all powerful god."

The problem with characters is that we tend to have the ability to over develop them. This is a proper example. This content is in no means trying to strike at the character's creator. I only want to give some helpful advice.

Everything looked tidy until you got to him becoming an Emperor. But what really toppled this was the fact that he is the most powerful sith to ever live. How would one determine that? It seems that this bit of information is more of a personal opinion not a narrative one.

Now if you would have said: "He was truly the most powerful sith that ever lived. He was a god to us."

- Aruun Jet about Darth Malphas

If you do it this way it is a more personal opinion. It is what Aruun Jet actualy feels. While if you simply state it, it leaves a clear signal that is totally off. Let us move on. Let us discuss the Dark One thing.

I think this was very clever, seeing as there is some room in the films. They do not actually say it, so cudos. However you walk a thin line so be very careful. If you are not then he will come across as god-modded rather than a developed character.

As for the powerful god thing in the summary, I would remove it. It serves no purpose but to confuse and perplex, no one can simply state there character as god--like. Remember to leave speculation, it helps so much. There is always doubt. It can help you so much.

Maybe he is the Dark One but shroud it. Maybe he isn't and have some sort of backstory to imply this. Speculation will make this character more intresting, because of the doubt and confusion of being the Dark One. In the end you let your readers decide until the final moment it is all revealed.

Anyway this is my opinion. In the end this is your character and I can only offer advice. So thank you for listening. I do hope you mull over what I have said.

--Ourarilya (Talk) 17:03, December 16, 2011 (UTC)