CS:Dalton Wylind II

This is the review page for the good article nomination of Dalton Wylind II.

Oppose

 * 1) From the very over-the-top introductory Resolute Desk of Brandon Rhea:
 * 2) *General:
 * 3) **You’re missing era icons.
 * 4) **The introduction is far too long. There’s no requirement preventing that long introduction, but I’d really suggest cutting it down. When compared to the length of the rest of the article, there’s just too much information in there.
 * 5) **You’ve got spacing errors between paragraphs at a few points in the article. Be sure to go through and fix those.
 * 6) **In the Redemption section and Revenge section, you need to put information in there. You can’t just link to other articles, especially when they’re fan fiction novels that aren’t even posted on SWF or anywhere else from what I can see. The “Main article” thing should only be used for articles about in-universe events and people, etc., not novels. They should also only be used sparingly when you want to condense information and direct people to another article for more information.
 * 7) **“Skills, Powers and Abilities” should actually be titled “Powers and abilities”, and it should come after the “Personality and traits” section. Your powers section also shouldn’t really be a list like that, in my opinion.
 * 8) **A 62 kilobyte article with no Behind the scenes section? I don’t think so. Please add one.
 * 9) **I’ll review more later. - Brandon Rhea (talk) (contribs) 03:18, 6 January 2009 (UTC)