Talk:Star Wars: Civil War/@comment-5148107-20191010025141

Found some time to read through Civil War, so here's my review.

I don't think it's as good as Revival and Ryloth Under Siege. The entire story feels super rushed, arguably more so than RUS felt, and just doesn't really work with only 10 small chapters. I was able to read through it all in no more than half an hour. It lacks description throughout, and I wasn't sold in the slightest on most of the characters to be honest.

- Stone's comeback. There was SO MUCH potential for Stone's return. I will admit, how Ponds managed to find him was pretty clever--just from reading a Naboo news report. Now, before I actually get to Stone, I felt like you could've spent a little more time on Ponds from the beginning of the story up to when he meets Stone, just developing him more and showing how he lingers on the "death" of Stone. Now, the meeting itself was super rushed. Having it condensed not only into one chapter, but basically ten sentences (that's an exaggeration probably, I know) did not work and wasn't plausible to me in the slightest. Stone's motivation was perfectly valid though, and you could've built more on that to have a pretty powerful scene. Their confrontation ended kind of abruptly, and that was the last we saw of them until the final scene where they both appear out of nowhere. Now THAT part I probably disliked the most, I'm not going to lie. WHY did Stone choose to return? You never showed that resolution, and it seems like you were trying to play it off as a twist that he DID return! But why? How did Ponds and Stone know to attack the First Order base and save their comrades? Furthermore, I wasn't a fan of their convenient timing in arriving at the scene--ex machinas are something I always try to avoid in writing, they never come off as plausible.

- Scrape again. I won't dwell too long on this as it's the same issues as last time. In my opinion, Scrape was worse this time around--by the end he felt a little bit more comedic than dark and brooding, like he's supposed to be. Nothing about him and his motivation is ever really explained, but that's something I'm hoping to try and fix with Revelations (excited to begin work on that by the way!)

There's a lot more I could say, but I'm going to keep this one short. One more thing I will add however, the title of the story is very misleading. I thought Civil War would kind of replicate the Marvel Cinematic Universe where the Rebellion ends up fighting each other in combat over an ideological disagreement. I think that would've been interesting to see. Also, why is the Rebellion still a thing in the New Republic era? Your continuity and worldbuilding is very confusing, lacking, or in some places just nonexistent--again, description really needs improvement.

With that said, I am curious to read Yuuzhan Vong--I expect it'll have a slightly different mood from what this series has been about before.