Talk:Star Wars: Revival/@comment-173.90.97.218-20190718181636

So, you asked for feedback. I decided to give some.

First, I will be honest in what I thought of the work.

So, I think this has huge potential. Characters where mostly well done. Mainly I liked Aurra Sing and Stone. Patrick was interesting as well.

But, I thought Ponds could've been done better, and I didn't understand what Coach looked like. You'll want to describe that. Leia was done fine ( nothing real special or awful about it. ) most of the clones were forgettable and there deaths not to impactful, you might want to have less, or spend time developing them.

Description was lacking, sometimes I didn't exactly understand what was happening. You'll need to describe better in future works.

Dialogue was a bit cheesy sometimes, might want to work on that.

The prose wasn't great. ( not the worst I've seen though. ) it would benefit you to work on that.

The story was interesting.

Some of the things contradicted canon. ( Aurra Sing owning the Slave I for example. ) you could check out Wookiepedia for that stuff.

Also you should italicize your ship names. ( like Slave I instead of Slave I. )

I hope you found my critiques helpful, don't stop writing, you have immense potential.